the beach

something i wrote on the beach

The ocean is blue. The sun is sunny.The sun is shining on my hair. I feel the water at my feet. I feel the wind through my hair. I'm sitting on the sand watching the waves go back and fourth. The sand is warm and soft. The sun set is so beautiful. Birds are singing. I am at the beach. This is my happy ending.

Reviews

[Bare trees]

I am jealous of you. I would love to be there as the cool tide meets my feet and the warm sun settles on my shoulders. I'm must admit I'm conflicted a bit with this poem. It seems jumbled to me as far as placement of lines. I would also like to see you utilize the show don't tell method more. Other than that, a good poem.

[Amber Albores]

Thank you sir: )

[Cherry Pepperweb]

If we could choose our point of departure from earth, this is the place I would choose.

[Amber Albores]

Me too my friend

[Eye Q the Blac Poet]

This poem takes the reader to a beach