The Unseen

A poem questioning the existance of heaven and hell.

 

Foolish beliefs of the unseen

We live in a world that preaches about reality

Yet we believe in god the unseen

Place our fates in this higher power that no one has seen

No proof or fact his being

We believe we will go peacefully to heaven bowing to him

He will be our savior 

Deliver us from pain only if we believe in him

Do as he says yet he allows to suffer

Through our entire existance we endure agony

Follow his word he the unseen

We are promised the peace of heaven

For if we don't follow his almighty word our suffering 

Is an agonizing eternity

This we believe is our deliverence the unseen

Doomed to be tortured at the devils hands for eternity

The devil whom is also an entity

Foolish these beliefs how delusional can we be

Unseen beliefs so foolish but not me

We are our own saviors that will deliver us from suffering

Our own sinners and saints 

That will determine our fates we are our own almighty

Our own demons

We create our own heaven and hell with our decisions

How we choose to live our lives

 

 

 

We create our own harmony through prosperity 

For we strive for peaceful life we enjoy

Our own hell we condemn ourselves to things we choose

Of course your bound to suffer enternity

If we choose to disregard all that surrounds us

As long as we contribute to the chaos

Foolish these beliefs of the unseen for such intelligent beings

No not me I don't fear nor desire the unseen

I know that I am the force that will determine  my fate

I am creator of my eternity the unseen  

Reviews

[Freder Fredersen (aka G..]

Nicely done. Whether or not I a gree with your assessment is of no consequence. This was put together with seering tact. Point stated perfectly and with plenty of poetic prowess. And most importantly, it makes the reader think. Makes us all review what we believe or do not believe. That's a gift to anyone who truly wishes to reflect on their understanding or lack of understanding of this existence. Bravo!

Cheers!
FF

[Creepy Swine Guy]

Interesting. I find myself questioning the message here, but the construction is sound. I would however, suggest punctuation. As you wrote this poem, you know how it is supposed to sound. Punctuation is the instruction sheet that tells us how to read it ... tells us where the pauses and stops belong.

[Cam]

I completely agree.

This, camera shy God, ah, how I'd love to meet him...
Even Shroud of Turin isn't able to tell us anything.

Magnificent write!

[Kelley]

Very well spoken Amber. I love your thoughts
on everything calling it self Heaven or Hell.

Thanks for sharing.

Kelley