still there is something...

at last... i m now free .. :)

Now I m free…Free of your shadow….
Now I can be…Whatever I want…
Now you are not there…To hold my thoughts…
Now my mind races….To pretty new faces…
To calm new eyes…To make new ties…
Still there is something…Something that I hate to mention…
Something that gives me tension…Something that is… well something..
Don’t take it as lust…Nor it is love…..
But it is something…Something called my heart…
That you have taken forever……and now I hold it… torn apart… 
------------- Amar Laksh

Reviews

[Ohhhwillow]

Such a sense of accomplishment to overcome something that once was so binding. It still lingers, that essence of the past that reminds us of who we were and how we felt.. That bribes and torments with a cheeky smile. It takes strength. And while it is important to move on, I don't think we should ever be told to forget the trouble we faced. This piece incorporates both that strength and consciousness. Lovely

[InsanityWriter]

Beautiful. Amazingly done. I love it. It flows perfectly.

[amarlaksh]

thanks a lot :)

[Patricia B. Hepler]

Very nice! Enjoyed.
~pat

[luviva]

well... freee atlast but you r torn apart.
life is so hard and i find this writing so true.
great work

[Pragya Saxena]

Yeah.... and this one is my new fvrite! :)
Beautiful blend of broken emotions!! :)

[Salar Majak]

WELCOME BACK!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
that been said, i love this poem, a great come back of you!
poor heart, don't worry time heels all wounds,
you did a great job in showing the pain your character is going through
felt real
beautifuL!

[amarlaksh]

thnx sal :)
i m feeling really light now :)

[Stanley Wilson]

broken indeed loved it emotive and thought provoking

[Blue Ivory]

You're lucky you've been set free. Enjoy your freedom! Those of us who are still captivated by love are jealous! ;)

[Leslie Philibert]

I know amarlakish`s work, and like it. What I like here is the use of the ellipsis, that gives this a floating, undecided, reflective feeling, good write

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

well done amarlaksh. Yes, sometimes when we think we are free, we are actually not.