For u...

As i glanced upon thy form,
Nor do i see those silken tresses,
Neither the skin of pearls  borne,
Even not the perfect smile that embraces..
The only thing i ever see in you..
Is the halo that surrounds,
The lightest of the hue...
your heart, the heart of endless bounds

               ------ Amar laksh

Reviews

[Monster ^.^]

Substance over form... such true love! There is no problem with the message, but I have noticed this slight thing I want to notify you about... The Line: "Nor do i see those silken tresses" You shouldn't have Nor yet, since NOR is agreeing to something that was previously negated... but then, nothing is negative... perhaps you should exchange the 2nd and 3rd lines...

Neither the skin of pearls borne,
Nor those silken tresses do i see,

it sounds better... but that's my opinion :)

[Pragya Saxena]

Ohh My God!! I just Loved this one!! I mean it describes all the pure feelings...
Now this is my favourite one! :)

[yusuf]

An interesting amalgamation of words and thoughts! I liked how you have framed it! Kudos to you my dear fellow poet. :)
do visit my works, would love to hear it from you. :)

[being me]

The only thing i ever see in you..
Is the halo that surrounds,
The lightest of the hue...
your heart, the heart of endless bounds
exquisite

[Coyote Poetry]

A beautiful poem. I like the description and the ending. Good to see beauty in your world. No weakness in the excellent poem.
Coyote

[critic h]

very well written. but i have a doubt that since you dont love her because of her beauty then do you love her because she appears to be a goddess to you? since the word halo signifies goddess. and u cant love someones heart. I think we love someone because of some unique quality and because of heart.

[InsanityWriter]

Very pretty and sweet. ^_^ Grea job!

[Stanley Wilson]

great

[Baby Ricochet]

Pretty

[Leslie Philibert]

Good poem, I would like it even more with you instead of u in the title

[Christopher Wells]

Good job. I'm not one for poetry but it's pretty good.