Today..

Its all emotions.... it happened today only....i will always love u....

Today...

today I proposed to my love,

still I am not happy,

had met yesterday,

fell in love, deep tender love,

didnt noticed the flow of time,

whole day sat there waiting to see that caption

“ONLINE” and I was eccentric,

no worry of tuitions nor parents

only for her the “Happiness”

people told me she was out of my league

petrified as I told my friend,

now I made my mind up,

she should not know about this from others

thats why I told her, and got away

today I experienced my First and maybe last love.....

----- Amar laksh

Author's Note

mind my errors today felllas

Reviews

[Monster ^.^]

What a quick love! It creates a character who isn't able to fight for their want! Why is that so? :) But I somehow got confused if some lines should have been said earlier than others? Nevertheless, the message is strong! I know some people will be hit hard! :)

[Pragya Saxena]

This is exceptional...
The chaste feelings converted into words and such a poem...Amazing!

[being me]

riddling yet typical of young love...you've created an illusion of what most teens go through at some point in their lives...well done

[Ohhhwillow]

I feel like this is less about the speed in which your protagonist fell in love than it is about the concept of how fast things go when we feel such raw emotions! Adrenaline intoxicates us from feelings we often cannot suppress through out the day, and indeed hours fly by of thinking, of our minds surging.. This is very well written. :)

[Tarry Franck]

Sad but good write

[critic h]

love at first sight. the most beautiful form of love. but the poem describes a weak feeble lover who out of anxiety and belief of others decides to leave her. you love her not others. btw tujhe kaun mil gayi jise hum nhi jaante? meri story review kar de.

[Christopher Wells]

Good. Again, I'm not one for poetry, but it's nice. A little desperate and sad

[InsanityWriter]

Well done. Interesting write. (:

[Stanley Wilson]

awesome

[Leslie Philibert]

Sad ! But as they say, there are enough fish in the sea - nice one

[de_maruf]

fine