Through....

Its my first love poem, quite short :)

Through the yard, in autumn quiet  

Hand in hand, and love in sight,

Among crisp leaves, with tepid hearts

Soul shared in two parts

Parch lips, for another pair

Thirst deep, and minds bare…

                                                    --- Amar laksh

Reviews

[Stanley Wilson]

good use of words to conjure up images good work

[amarlaksh]

Thanks Mr. Stanley ! :)

[being me]

short but lovely...crisp and beautiful...

[Tarry Franck]

seefess

[Coyote Poetry]

Beautiful use of words in the poem. I had to read again for the strong description and the desire in the words. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[amarlaksh]

thanks coyote

[Leslie Philibert]

A fine cameo, well written.

[amarlaksh]

Thanks Leslie!

[amarlaksh]

Thanks all of u guys for your reviews !!

[Blue Ivory]

I like how you ended it. The description as always is great. Nice work!

[amarlaksh]

thanks! :)

[Icelanna]

Short sweet and fantastic! Very powerful and very beautiful.
Love to you x

[amarlaksh]

Thanks lanna! appreciate it ! :)

[amarlaksh]

Thanks lanna!! appreciate it :)

[Sid]

Nicely written, short but it conveys much. You were able to convey your thought through few but very well chosen words and I like that about this poem, beautifully done...great write!!

[amarlaksh]

thanks sid

[amarlaksh]

thanks sid!

[Jazmen]

this is really pretty. A good effort for a short, pleasant poem indeed. I like the imagery. Some things I wish were more descriptive, it seems like a wonderful setting for a poem, and something passionate seems to be going on, but all that is left to me to decide. I appreciate your style at any rate.
Nice work.

[amarlaksh]

jazmen really thank u for your honest review!!

[amarlaksh]

jazmen really thank u for your honest review!!