Through....

Through....

A Poem by amarlaksh
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Its my first love poem, quite short :)

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Through the yard, in autumn quiet  

Hand in hand, and love in sight,

Among crisp leaves, with tepid hearts

Soul shared in two parts

Parch lips, for another pair

Thirst deep, and minds bare…

                                                    --- Amar laksh

© 2013 amarlaksh


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It arises all the lost Feelings .. :)
Touchy ..


Posted 11 Years Ago


the poem is gud brilliantly written
but
bt
wo feeling nahi aayi
seems it lacks an ending
a feeling of incompletion is comes

Posted 11 Years Ago


Powerful write. Enjoyed.
~pat

Posted 11 Years Ago


nice fella.......

Posted 11 Years Ago


amarlaksh

11 Years Ago

Thanks buddy :)
krish

11 Years Ago

ahh......don't mention it.........
have a lovely day fella..........
This is very eloquent and flows beautifully!

Posted 11 Years Ago


amarlaksh

11 Years Ago

thanks Elise!
Very nicely written.

Posted 11 Years Ago


amarlaksh

11 Years Ago

Thanks NOODLES ! :)
s y e

11 Years Ago

Welcome.
Parch lips, for another pair
Thirst deep, and minds bare…

those are the two strongest rhyming lines i think ive ever read.

Posted 11 Years Ago


amarlaksh

11 Years Ago

Thanks UTW :P
Nice work for your first poem.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Love the use of the words 'tepid' and 'parch', flows perfectly, very delicately put. Sometimes love is as simple as that, I think the length is fitting to the honesty of true compassion. :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


amarlaksh

11 Years Ago

Thanks Willow :)

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amarlaksh
amarlaksh

Agra, Atheist, India



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