A Raily Ride

Its intense!

As I confide my form into the brownish booth,

With heat in and cold out, the humping of the coach

Copious thoughts slide my mind. Some of shades grey; fairer some

If the humming of wheels in agony stops?

Or like the child, who stares at gate,

If the sweet vendor would ever pass along?

Better still I would be to think,

Like the intense reader, drowned in write,

Who at times glazes to see,

About the cabin for another comrade,

 Nor even I would ponder, upon the maidens,

As the youth with a book held, do with slight stares

Like that of sage who tells beads of rosary,

With murmurs quiet and nervous mind

 I would never think alike.

The man I am like,

Is one that tells about a raily ride

 

                      ---- Amar laksh

Reviews

[william keepers]

Well done Amar, it is a raily ride indeed! Very unique perceptions you have!

[Writer *78*]

this is your best one yet went on my favorites list hopefully ill be able to see more like this.

Writer 78

[Faffy]

Very nice! Took me for a ride:)

Well done!!

Roshan

[quinfinn]

you have painted a wonderful and culturally impressive picture all with your words herein...splendid write!

[C.R.Turner]

oh raily? Gotta be honest, a lot of this flew over my head, but it sure sounds nice! :)

[Tex]

very nice write. loved this:

With murmurs quiet and nervous mind
I would never think alike.
The man I am like,
Is one that tells about a raily ride

[de_maruf]

fine

[Leslie Philibert]

Like the puns here, the Raily Ride, rail/daily - there is a long poetic tradition of writing about travel . good job.

[Baby Ricochet]

Groovy man

[InsanityWriter]

Great job. :) Another good one. ^_^