A Raily Ride

A Poem by amarlaksh

Its intense!

As I confide my form into the brownish booth,

With heat in and cold out, the humping of the coach

Copious thoughts slide my mind. Some of shades grey; fairer some

If the humming of wheels in agony stops?

Or like the child, who stares at gate,

If the sweet vendor would ever pass along?

Better still I would be to think,

Like the intense reader, drowned in write,

Who at times glazes to see,

About the cabin for another comrade,

Nor even I would ponder, upon the maidens,

As the youth with a book held, do with slight stares

Like that of sage who tells beads of rosary,

With murmurs quiet and nervous mind

I would never think alike.

The man I am like,

Is one that tells about a raily ride

---- Amar laksh

© 2012 amarlaksh

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Sami Khalil

A splendid read and write...Thank you for sharing...:)

Posted 11 Years Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

11 Years Ago

Thanks for your lovely review Sami :)

11 Years Ago

My pleasure...Any time....:)

Pragya Saxena

Yeah !! u cn never think alike :P and that is what made you forget the thing u had to do aftr tuitons..
Well all i can say is These little lines hide a big truth in them..This one was deep! :)

Posted 11 Years Ago

Sonali Arora

This one is just fabulous...!! i just love to read it...!! :)

Posted 11 Years Ago

11 Years Ago

Thnx Sonali!!! :D

Ohhhwillow

You are a great write and I'm yet to be disappointed with anything of yours I have read. What I love most about this peace is the way you pull the reader in through the line "like the intense reader, drowned in write", for me this was the highlight as it is really engaging. All I can say is perhaps have a second look as there may be some unnecessary or misused punctuation, for example, I felt the comma after "ponder" and "held" interrupted the flow slightly. All in all though, fantastic