Ode to a dear land

its dedicated to my school. St. Peters. It is quite old. estbld in 1846

ode to a dear land

when the winds had sublimed,
the majesty of a wonder
and the sands of time,
had turned it older
to umask upon, a dead heav'n,
of the broken ropes,
of the galleries ravin'd
full of wailing hopes
who that cried through the years,
ages that rolled o'er its gate.
For they had the tears
cursing none, none but fate.
O' if one thinks of the prestige passed
that splendor, granduer and tints.
The fervour in past
wattery eyens would sure be,
and hairs would be etched off
upon the skins of you and me
excuse many, may taken of!
----Amar laksh

Reviews

[de_maruf]

classical

[amarlaksh]

Thanks

[luviva]

ok..
where should i begin from??
first i loved the flow, word choice and the idea behind it.
real good and great statements in there.
real expressional..
continue inspiring my friend

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Hi Amar, this poem has a distinctly classical tone to it. Working in historic Oxford I could relate to the sentiments you have laid before us.

[amarlaksh]

thank you very much john

[tarryfranck97]

Job Well Done!!!! Keep up the great work!

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

beautiful, like a written revaltion of what's to come.

[Coyote Poetry]

Amazing description in the poem. I love the use of language. Strong statements made the poem a pleasure to read. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[InsanityWriter]

Nice job!! :)

[Baby Ricochet]

Great job

[DrD]

I have notice, Amar, a growing maturity in your works that I am very happy to see. You are gaining depth of thought and perspectives that come with experience. This is a very worthy work and a joy to read.

[Adam Whitworth]

well done

[amarlaksh]

At least a "well done" now. Yay!!! Thanks!