The Spark

its a poem written in victorian english

Untreasur’d, of thy glory O’ state my!
Burghers stand thy wrath
Ragged shine, now thy
Erring we, lack troth.

Barred of verity, our quintessence
World-lings see thy taxing
Sauce us, of thy essence
Cast the flouted relaxing.

Whilst thee in dust’s beak,
Fond coz stay bloody
Of parts come a-peak
Rise bonny I prithee!

An if thee pity,
Shall then change
Hatred of civility
Motley by witty.

So to us ‘scape,
Turn to mend our shades fake.
Entame us or castaway.
Spark hither, spark thither, O’ spark stay!
----- Amar laksh

Reviews

[David Scott]

I like your use of the "victorian" voice.Well done.

[Jo March]

I like the archaic language, it's takes skill to read, as well as write.

[Jo March]

I like the archaic language, it's takes skill to read, as well as write.

[emmy bon]

haha i love love the choice of the words, 16th century words, nice

[Ohhhwillow]

Good attempt, I personally have a thing for gothic victorian style writing, however your ideas are slurred through this and I'd love to be able to capture your emotions fully however it takes a great deal experience in this style before that will be possible, keep at it if you think it can go that far and I wish you luck! x

[InsanityWriter]

I love how you used 'olden' language. ;) You worked it all out perfectly. ^_^ Excellent job!

[hogan]

Had to read this one three times and still found the meaning obscured by the use of, maybe too much old English text, only read Chaucer in a modern format so my feel for this type of language is limited. I will always give my honest and personal opinion.

[DrD]

One goes back a few centuries to capture this one. The style is intriguing and the theme interesting. I like this one.

[Emberlorna]

I think it's dark & so lovely :} You have a great talent! Thanks for sharing!