Girl on ganges bank

i consider it to be one of my finest, hope you would think the same

At hest of the lady’s mirth,
Jocund she raised,
Waif and derelict of birth,
Bitter trails many paved.
Every dawn she cheered.
Moaned on each night,
Common with the tears,
Of such a poor plight,
Eluding the crank,
Went to her kin,
A cow on Ganges’s bank,
Was all she had win,
Extricating the cow,
Swirling soft hands at her plea,
By the unusual bow,
Bathed her thoroughly she.
Gloomy then tied her,
To a small shaft,
Went then to work,
Held the oars and the raft,
An aged aunt sans time,
Her raft was so,
Sat in to start a scenic rhyme
And praised in to every hoe,
Austral she sailed,
To the awry ghats,
With biers that laid,
On flowery rafts,
Next crossed her path,
To look for fare,
Found one, kept his troth,
Fixed and gave others a glare.
Oaring around the Ganges,
With flowers in plenty,
And garbage under bridges,
Sailed she in fashion; hefty,
Hurry to the next one,
And for the dirt too,
Up and down in her fun,
Did business in the summer loo,
Thus back came wealthier,
To her cow, to the fields,
With wit some healthier,
And wholesome yields,
Showed she her savings,
A rupee and a two,
By her called parents;
Found none but a shoe.
In the open lawn,
Battered her to ground, the father,
With his shoes on,
Gave as a butcher rather,
Her bones cracked lie’,
Her blood gushed out,
But came nay a cry!
Came nay a shout!
--------------Amar laksh

Reviews

[DrD]

Amar, I flew to New Delhi enroute to Katmandu and stayed a while to see something of the culture. I visited Pakistan and Afghanistan and found it all fascinating as it can only be seen by someone who doesn't need to live there. What you describe is not fiction, rather events far too common and you have captured it with amazing grace and acceptance. I admire your work and you. Thank you.

[amarlaksh]

Thank you very much sir!! I am really grateful for your review sir.!

[Stanley Wilson]

cleverly written work enjoyed it and the images you created.

[de_maruf]

excellent

[de_maruf]

excellent

[Writer *78*]

nice work you can relate to the character here. well done

[Leslie Philibert]

Indeed very good. I was too in India may years ago and you have here superbly captured the spirit of your fascinating country. You simply know exactly what you are writing about and present it superbly in, a fast- tempoed, well written poem, great job.

[Pragya Saxena]

Eccentric!!
Daily happening so brilliantly captured! :O
And the Culture and every deatail the poem has!!

[Patricia B. Hepler]

A dark side of life. The girl lived her life in acceptance and yet, kept hope til the end.
Amarlaksh, this is an emotional and extremely powerful write.
*pat

[amarlaksh]

thank you so much patricia

[de_maruf]

fine

[Blue Ivory]

This is really deep and beautiful! Wow, you have pure talent...This is amazing!

[Pradeep Nair]

It's fantasy churned out of reality.