Calling In the Rain

Calling In the Rain

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Wind blows in urgent deep dull tones,

Calling in the rain.

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Echoing over the rolling dune

is the sound of the crashing waves,

Dark horizon boils and spills

turning blue to misty gray.

The strong cool breeze offers one last flight,

Calling in the rain.

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A warm gray stench sets in,

as the clouds blot out the sun

The wind picks up and horizon nears

and drops begin to fall

A small faint sound from across the water

only heard by the keenest of ears

From a dark iron shape, miles away

In amongst the waves and blinding spray

His desperate call falls short.

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A man, calling in the rain.

Author's Note

June-28-2021 Aidan Singletary

Reviews

[Red Brick Keshner]

What is lovely about this poem is its visual dramatic movement. Short of being theatrical it moves the reader and pushes along emotion and thought with a tinge of intense conclusion: "In amongst the waves and blinding spray/ His desperate call falls short.///A man, calling in the rain." Thanks for sharing.

[Aidan Singletary]

I wrote this poem during a time of great movement and dramatic change. My life seemed to have turned upside down and yet, there I was, still stuck in the same place. I am glad this came out in my finished work. And I am so glad you enjoyed it! Thank you for reading!

[HumanNaturePoet]

Stunning imagery! The stanzas themselves, going from short to long, echo the direness, the gravity of the man's situation. I also love the subtle use of repetition at the end of each stanza. You captured an impending coastal storm so vividly, including all the senses. Great piece!

[Aidan Singletary]

Thank you so much for the kind review! I enjoyed writing this so much and it is a joy to share with others.
I'm glad you enjoyed the repetition, I was afraid it was not subtle enough at first.

[Robert Haigh]

A poem full of atmosphere and drama. Nicely described. I enjoyed the read.

[Aidan Singletary]

Thank you, I am glad you enjoyed it!

[Temperance]

There are many times that I do not use any punctuation in my poems. As Aura said, it's up to the writer. I enjoyed your descriptive poem. Great imagery. I look forward to reading other pieces of your work. I enjoyed this read. Temp

[Aidan Singletary]

Thank you for the feedback! I appreciate your time!

[Aura]

When I read this out loud, it sounded fine to me. I'm not a punctuation expert but in my opinion, it's up to the writer if they want to add punctuation to their poems, I don't think it's needed, maybe I'm wrong... I enjoyed reading your poem nonetheless, you describe the calmness right before the storm. The warmth, then darkness looming over. I also liked your repetitive use of the line " Calling in the rain"

[Aidan Singletary]

Thanks, Aura. I appreciate the review and the feedback!

[Aura]

You're welcome