friends

you can make friends a lot of ways like,

a little drunk,

just hanging out at the mall,

school,

online,

cellular device (aka cell

but what makes a friend is,

one that laughs at you when you fall,

or if you take them down with you,

or kicks you when your down then laughs,

listens to your roblems,

makes fun of you just for the heck of it ,

kees your secrets,

makes you laugh,

crys when you cry so you dont feel bad,

influences you,

encourages you,

barley ever fight with each other,

lays with you,

all this makes the greatest friends ever not being serious ... not all fun and games... but all of the above!

 

 

i dedicate this to alyssa kamf she is my bestest bfff for ever luv ya chick

 

Author's Note

i am ten and in fourth grade

Reviews

[Your Victim]

Capturing the idea of friendship is usually difficult because there are so many things that make up a true and loyal one. However, I think that you understand the relationship and traits required and your words describe these factors well. Great friends are essential in this life and should never be taken for granted. I sincerely hope that everyone sees these traits in the people they love and that they never take them for granted.
My few corrections for you, though, are that you need to watch your construction of the poem. Many people tend to ignore the rules of grammar with poetry, but they actually should still apply. Be sure to capitalize the first word of each line... you did a wonderful job of punctuating at the end, though. Also, you have a few misspellings that should probably be edited "kees your secrets" for example, needs to be 'keeps your secrets', and make sure that if you have any parenthetical information--- anything that is inside ()--- you must close the parenthesis. It should say (aka cell)...
Your ideas are complex and they are beginning to form into well constructed poetry. Be sure to edit, though. It makes the reviewer's job that much easier. :)