Dreaming in fresh honey

citrus fruit,
sour in my mouth,
pungent,
but sweet.

reminds me of you,
of us.
sulking in a meadow with tall grass and pink petaled tulips,
and cows,
and valley trees,
like the ones from California.

to lay on the grass,
to rest my head upon it,
rough edged but also soft at its root,
you remind me of the grass.

you don’t remind me of the sunlight,
i remind me of the sunlight.
i am lovely and i glisten and blaze red hot waves of tenderness throughout
i shun out the moonlight and welcome the sultriness of the sun,

but understand me,
i’m sad because the prairies fall to dirt and nothingness when you bestow upon their land
but they are not whole when you vanish.

let’s just flee to the golden state like i always say,
why can’t you just listen?
we can lay beyond eternal rest in the pearly gates,
just me and you,
of this i desire,
try something new,
we’ll mirror heaven

i’m weeping in a white dress by the willows,
come lay here with me baby.

Reviews

[Fabian G. Franklin]

"You run for the money. You don't even know about wild mountain honey." Steve Miller Band

I'd like to see the Pacific some day. It's on my "bucket list". "but understand me,
I’m sad because the prairies fall to dirt and nothingness " This line reminded me of Kansas. I've never seen so much flat empty. This was softly romantic and sensual. You appeal to our senses and feelings so well with this poem. I enjoyed the read. F.

[lovelymarina]

Thank you dearllllyyyyyyy!

Marina :)

[ghost]

marina ! this is gorgeously done . . .
your writing style reminds me of a Lana song, your imagery is vivid and your word usage is inexplicably pretty

"rough edged but also soft at its root,
you remind me of the grass."

[lovelymarina]

Oh my gosh lana is my biggest inspiration and favorite artist of all time. This review, this comment, was ecstasy to me. Thank you so much…..
Xx
Marina

[Coyote Poetry]

I love the complete poem dear Lovely Marina.
"let’s just flee to the golden state like i always say,
why can’t you just listen?
we can lay beyond eternal rest in the pearly gates,
just me and you,
of this i desire,
try something new,
we’ll mirror heaven"
The above lines. Maybe wishes we do hold. Thank you for sharing the Excellent poetry.
Coyote

[lovelymarina]

I’m so glad you loved the ending of the poem. Thank you for your amazing review… means the world

Marina

[Coyote Poetry]

Was my pleasure dear Marina and you are welcome.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"weeping in a white dress by the willows"
that line struck me so hard...
great image...
those weeping willows wish for a different outcome.
and remind me of how many loves in my life who don't remind me of sunlight.
I have to be my own rays.
j.

[lovelymarina]

I changed that line a couple of times and ultimately stuck with that one. I’m so glad it struck imagery for you … that’s all I can hope for!

Yep… they do wish for a different outcome… same here Jacob, a lot of my lovers are far from the sun…

Thanks for the review and so glad you enjoyed.
Marina

[Zoe Richardson]

So much feeling in this one! I love the last lines, especially.

[lovelymarina]

Thank you so much for the review, Zoe
:)
Marina

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

I so enjoyed reading this poem, especially being native Californian and you perfectly describing our valleys here. In this area of Northern California I'm very much closer to the farmlands and wine country as well. Not to mention the coast too. Thank you for sharing your art with us.

[lovelymarina]

So cool that your from California. I write about that place a lot… glad you liked it and glad I captured the vibe ….

Thanks for the review :)
Marina

[Chris Shaw]

The sweet and sour of a relationship come through so well here. "rough edged but also soft at its root", contrast too. The poem oozes wanting something more, something not on offer. The final two lines are really sad. I saw the weeping in a white dress (could be a wedding dress) here. She loves him so. Really poignant work Marina.

I note you have changed the title. The second one reflects the mood of the poem much better.

Chris

[lovelymarina]

Thank you so much Chris… yes… you get it. A poignant poem it is… dreaming of a different outcome. I’m still trying to pick a good title that I feel really matches the poem’s vibe, this one may not be final! But thanks for that note :)
You’re awesome, as always

Marina