In a world full of nothing, a girl is sitting alone in a chair, whispering:

In a world full of nothing, a girl is sitting alone in a chair, whispering:

A Poem by Amanda J. S.
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Hm.... (how I once felt)

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"You have taken me away from everything I love.

You have abducted me.

You beckoned me to follow you.

I didn't want to.

I could feel that you weren't good for me.

But you wouldn't go away.

You just stood there,

Gawking at me with those hollow eyes,

Whispering how miserable you were.

When I at last followed you,

Because you frightened me,

You left me in this world full of nothing.

A world where no flare of light occurs.

A world were not even my worst nightmares dare to go.

You left me in this world,

This grim world,

Where I can reach no one,

And no one can reach me."

© 2012 Amanda J. S.


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Amanda J. S.
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could be shorter for more impact, but good nonetheless

Posted 12 Years Ago


Wow... "no flare of light occurs." This piece is ultra-dark! I don't know where you took me but I am stuck there with old "hollow eyes." Now, how do I get back home again? A little help, please?

BTW, did you notice that it was an androgynous write? Excellent mass appeal from that.

Well done!! :)


Posted 12 Years Ago


This is so powerful.Amazing work as always..I am dumbfounded..you have a true talent.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Very thought provoking, Amanda.

Posted 12 Years Ago


I love this poem :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


fine start and excellent end
good work
keep it going

Posted 12 Years Ago


This piece I can relate too. I have felt this way so many times. It's not a place anyone should be. This write was sad, but great. I loved the emotions within the piece. Thanks for sharing.

Posted 12 Years Ago


The first and last three lines are really good, I love it. Great job

Posted 12 Years Ago



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Amanda J. S.
Amanda J. S.

Writersville, Denmark



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