In a world full of nothing, a girl is sitting alone in a chair, whispering:

Hm.... (how I once felt)

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"You have taken me away from everything I love.

You have abducted me.

You beckoned me to follow you.

I didn't want to.

I could feel that you weren't good for me.

But you wouldn't go away.

You just stood there,

Gawking at me with those hollow eyes,

Whispering how miserable you were.

When I at last followed you,

Because you frightened me,

You left me in this world full of nothing.

A world where no flare of light occurs.

A world were not even my worst nightmares dare to go.

You left me in this world,

This grim world,

Where I can reach no one,

And no one can reach me."

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Sukylola]

Love it!I wish i could write poetry like this.

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem is very sad. hard to give everything up and then be left alone.
"When I at last followed you,
Because you frightened me,'
The strong description gave life to the poem. A very sad ending to a excellent poem.
Coyote

[Bare Trees]

I would agree with UFOAuthor in that the character, although written by you, is genderless which helps both male and female readers relate to it. You touch on the dark side and the damage done through words like:
You beckoned me to follow you.
I didn't want to.
Or
You left me in this world,
This grim world,
Where I can reach no one,
And no one can reach me."

This could all relate to a bad relationship as you've mentioned how you once felt that way, or if the reader is so inclined, it could have a more sinister role such as something from the horror genre.

You did a fine job of writing on this one and as I can see, others agree.

[Fabio_Cassilias]

I'ts Quite Deep Really..
It has this dark grim background mist to it..like when you are in a state of deppresssion...Very good Piece

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This reminded me a lot about being on the state of depression, and how it confounds your soul of how you actually got there from the start. The imagery you use and the metaphors are brilliant. Thank you for your read request ,Amanda, I always enjoy your work.

-Cord

[Cerise]

Awww...very nicely written..heart touching..very emotional...very well described the pain and torment...the loneliness..the blaming period...very well done..fantastic..:D

[Cynthia Man]

A very beautiful poem... It's sad, how the world has nothing but ourself, it hurts a lot...it's a really powerful poem... Like it a lot :D
NIce written!

[Whitney Kleinhuizen]

Sad and powerful. The last two lines really end it well.

[Bumble]

I love the texture of this poem! And the picture fits the poem perfectly. Good job!