I once knew a girl...

She always had a wide smirk planted on her beautiful face

Was always welcoming

Always radiating glee.

But her soul wasn't alight with that same happiness.

I could clearly spot that torment,

Behind those big blue eyes of hers.

She was wearing a mask every day, 

I think.

Wouldn’t want people to feel sorry for her,

To think that she was weak.

But her real problem was,

I think,

That she was hiding it,

The sorrow,

The depression.

Because people thought that she was alright.

People thought that she was truly…

Happy.

Only I saw that she wasn’t

And I alone 

Couldn't save her.

Author's Note

hm..

Reviews

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Wow! That's sad D: It's hard to realize those you do hide their feelings. Lovely!!!!
WOOT WOTT!!!!! ^-^

[Raven]

I really like this one :)
The contemplative way it flows and how honest it sounds

[Cerise]

wooow...very nicely described your own feelings..:)..if am not wrong..:P...its very true that some times we r the onli ones who identifies the storm going within us...sometimes if you have lucky friends they will identify it, and most probably cheer u up....very nicely written...:)

[de_maruf]

good shape, good thinking and amazing expression
thanks Amanda J. S.
for share it

--de

[Ufi Auttorri ~ Amy C. T..]

Oooh... this is a tricky one. More prose than poem but with a flavor of soliloquy. I like that. I am curious though. Why did the writer want to save her? Why couldn't they? Why did she _need_ "saving?" Do sorrowful and depressed people need saving; maybe they just need a hug? Forgive me for thinking out loud. It's just some of the questions your poem evoked. Thank you, Amanda! :)

[Steven Cash]

Are you the girl? lol

wonderfully written

[Whitney Kleinhuizen]

Deep and honest. I love how you ended it, the lines "And I alone, couldn't save her." are haunting and wonderful. Great job

[Amanda]

Great job, I like it

[Dr. Wood ?]

It should surely be 'her soul WASN'T alight....You are good at this, it is drawn from personal experience and you do it well

[Amanda J. S.]

Woops! I originally wrote her eyes weren't alight" I must have forgotten to change weren't to wasn't ^^

[Dr. Wood ?]

soul is far better than eyes..you did good to alter that

[Amanda J. S.]

Haha, yeah! That's what I thought! ^^