The Lack of Beauty...

The morning air is crisp and sharp.

The dew on the windows is beautiful as diamonds.

I long for the times

Where I could indulge their beauty

But I guess it is too much to ask.

I miss the times where I could enjoy the seas.

I miss the times where a rainy day

Was a cozy day.

Never coming back.

I lack a happiness 

That lets me enjoy the scents 

And the taste of Earth’s wonders.

I lack a happiness 

That helps me get through the day.

Oh, how I just long for the time

Miss the time

Where I could just live.

Reviews

[Bumble]

Beautiful.

[Amanda]

Simple and straight, I like it(:

[MachinaWriter]

Evocative, emotional, simple. Thank you for this. Keep up the good work.

[Steven Cash]

love it

Really great job, Amanda!

[Ufi Auttorri ~ Amy C. T..]

I like it too! Suggestions:

- 2nd line, either drop the "is" or change to "is as"; or perhaps drop the "is" and replace with a comma or hyphen? It needs "adjusting."

This is just so sad... "I miss the times where a rainy day ... Was a cozy day." Bwah! ;oQ

The ending just leaves me more curious than ever. What does it mean, to "just live?" It begs for more elaboration.

[Jimmy Combs]

Excellent

[Dr. Wood ?]

there is an innocence about this...I am no great poet but that is because I don't try too hard...I think you have the potential to be very good...You just need to think around corners a little....be a bit more secretive...You will be better for it