My Beautiful Void
A Poem by
Amanda J. S.
A feeling living inside most depressed souls...
A void
In my heart,
my soul,
And my head.
That void,
Filling me with pain
With aching agony.
This void
A beautiful disaster
Beauty in form of pain
Pain and torment.
My void,
Controlling my senses,
My body,
And my soul.
Oh how I admire that beautiful,
tormenting void.
© 2012 Amanda J. S.
Author's Note
My beautiful agony....
What do you guys think? :-)
Reviews
Very nice. I love it 100/100
Posted 12 Years Ago
very very beautiful ....well done
Posted 12 Years Ago
very very beautiful ....well done
This is a good write
Keep writing (:
Posted 12 Years Ago
This is a good write
Keep writing (:
so very sweet
Posted 12 Years Ago
so very sweet
i lov the use of word tormenting
Posted 12 Years Ago
i lov the use of word tormenting
Your use of repetition really emphasizes on the concept of your piece. I also like how you switch the words from "this void" to "my void" , because this reveals to your audience that it is very personal. Great job.
Posted 12 Years Ago
Your use of repetition really emphasizes on the concept of your piece. I also like how you switch the words from "this void" to "my void" , because this reveals to your audience that it is very personal. Great job.
12 Years Ago
Thank you :-) Glad you noticed it!
i can feel the emotional.. great poem, like this :)
Posted 12 Years Ago
i can feel the emotional.. great poem, like this :)
I liked it a lot Amanda, really, I did.
It was amazing, and somehow reminded me of the beautiful, yet haunting, power of the human mind
Posted 12 Years Ago
I liked it a lot Amanda, really, I did.
It was amazing, and somehow reminded me of the beautiful, yet haunting, power of the human mind
12 Years Ago
Yay! Glad you liked it! :-)
Sounds beautiful. I like how you made soemthing sad and upsetting sound lovely. Hell yeah! *high fives*
Posted 12 Years Ago
Sounds beautiful. I like how you made soemthing sad and upsetting sound lovely. Hell yeah! *high fives*
12 Years Ago
Thank you! *squeals and jumps up and down while clapping*
12 Years Ago
HELL YEAH! *jumps with you then rolls away like a pencil*
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Added on August 30, 2012
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Tags:
void ,
anger ,
depression ,
beautiful ,
agony ,
pain ,
me ,
amanda ,
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Author
Amanda J. S. Writersville, Denmark
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I am a sixteen-year-old girl from Denmark, and my name is Amanda :-)
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