My Beautiful Void

My Beautiful Void

A Poem by Amanda J. S.
"

A feeling living inside most depressed souls...

"

A void

In my heart,

my soul,

And my head.

 

That void,

Filling me with pain

With aching agony.


This void

A beautiful disaster

Beauty in form of pain

Pain and torment.


My void,

Controlling my senses,

My body,

And my soul.


Oh how I admire that beautiful,

 tormenting void.

© 2012 Amanda J. S.


Author's Note

Amanda J. S.
My beautiful agony....

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Very nice. I love it 100/100

Posted 12 Years Ago


very very beautiful ....well done

Posted 12 Years Ago


This is a good write
Keep writing (:

Posted 12 Years Ago


so very sweet

Posted 12 Years Ago


i lov the use of word tormenting

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Your use of repetition really emphasizes on the concept of your piece. I also like how you switch the words from "this void" to "my void" , because this reveals to your audience that it is very personal. Great job.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Amanda J. S.

12 Years Ago

Thank you :-) Glad you noticed it!
i can feel the emotional.. great poem, like this :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


Amanda J. S.

12 Years Ago

:-)
I liked it a lot Amanda, really, I did.

It was amazing, and somehow reminded me of the beautiful, yet haunting, power of the human mind

Posted 12 Years Ago


Amanda J. S.

12 Years Ago

Yay! Glad you liked it! :-)
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Sounds beautiful. I like how you made soemthing sad and upsetting sound lovely. Hell yeah! *high fives*

Posted 12 Years Ago


Amanda J. S.

12 Years Ago

Thank you! *squeals and jumps up and down while clapping*
_

12 Years Ago

HELL YEAH! *jumps with you then rolls away like a pencil*
Amanda J. S.

12 Years Ago

:-D

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Added on August 30, 2012
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Tags: void, anger, depression, beautiful, agony, pain, me, amanda, girl

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Amanda J. S.
Amanda J. S.

Writersville, Denmark



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