it is good,however, if the the first 2 lines were as follow to rhyme :The sound of your voice...Leaving me but no choice.The melody with sounds..I can keep listening to...For so many hours to go. Just a suggestion.
Hmmmm.................I know what it is.....its the first two lines....am not keen on the voice choice rhyme at the start.....it set me up all wrong for the rest of the poem.
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