His Eternal Love

His Eternal Love

A Poem by Amanda J. S.
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A little poem I wrote about true love :-) (in my eyes)

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His Eternal Love

He went to bed every night,

Aching for her.

Aching for her presence.

Trembling with grief.


Waking up every morning,

Mourning the loss of his eternal love.

Mourning his beautiful angel.

The love was lost,

Gone,

Buried deep in the dirty ground.


He wouldn’t ever get to touch that soft skin again.

Her skin.

Their lips would never get to entwine again.

Never again would he taste her.

That alluring taste,

The taste he had never been able to resist.


Decades after their sunder,

He held his last breath,

Thinking about her.

Only her.

His eternal love,

And he was sure,

Certain, even,

That they would meet again.


He was buried beside her,

His eternal young wife,

Friend,

Flirt,

Mistress,

Love.

She had been all that.

All that and more.

So much more.

She was... 

Her.

© 2012 Amanda J. S.


Author's Note

Amanda J. S.
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You tend to write over things which you may've experienced or not,,,
So I applaud on the natural pose of the poem Keep writing (:

Posted 12 Years Ago


a true love indeed
=]

Posted 12 Years Ago


Next to perfect, really nice work

Posted 12 Years Ago


like this poem..
like the way you write this and this poem it self is great :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


wow.... super kool

Posted 12 Years Ago


love it :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


Love poetry: most of it is very typical. This is in between outstanding and the norm. It's....a superb average poem. Your rhythm, I believe, is choppy. Some poems are accented by choppy rhythms, but this piece shouldn't be. In poetry, ending a line gives it a natural pause. Adding commas and periods gives the line an even more dramatic pause. In my honest opinion, you don't need so much punctuation. But, hey, if it sounds good to you, then keep it as is.

Posted 12 Years Ago


great write

Posted 12 Years Ago



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Tags: love, hate, anger, fury, compassion, passion, death, loss, sunder

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Amanda J. S.
Amanda J. S.

Writersville, Denmark



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