The Porcelain Doll

This is a very symbolic Poem.

The Porcelain Doll

 

Once, I was given a doll,

She was made out of porcelain,

And oh how beautiful she was.

How fragile she was.

One mist-filled day, 

I went to play with another kid.

She had been given a porcelain doll, as well.

While I openly played with mine,

The other kid held hers close to her body.

She didn’t seem to be the one for sharing.

 

One day the other kid asked me,

“Can I borrow your doll?”

I told her,

“Absolutely!”

And oh I hoped she’d gentle with her,

My beloved porcelain doll.

 

Two nights later,

The kid came back.

In her hand she was carrying a sack.

The kid didn’t seem to feel a thing.

She gave me the sack,

Not one stain of pity on her face.

 

I asked,

“where is my doll?”

She pointed at the sack,

Turned on her heel,

Walked away.

 

Now I was alone.

I had no one at all.

Not even my beloved porcelain doll.

she was shattered to pieces.

And oh how I hoped I could fix her.  

-Amanda

Author's Note

This is a very fragile poem. It's about how easily people can shatter your things without any traceable remorse.

Reviews

[Westminster Abbey]

I like it! The words flow together like a poem should

[Amanda J. S.]

Thank you!

[SmileBig :)]

This is really sweet and sad and I can totally relate! I kind of used the porcelain doll as a metaphor. I thought how easily someone can get their heart broken while the person doing the breaking easily moves on and doesn't seem to care he/she hurt them at all.

[Amanda J. S.]

Yeah, my intention with this poem is also to make it relatable :-)

[SmileBig :)]

Well then you did a good job :)

[Amanda J. S.]

Thanks :-)

[SmileBig :)]

No problem

[zainul]

Written about the behavior of children only.
Older person like me is also often behave either like or other girl.
Mind blowing piece.
Congratulations!!!

[Amanda J. S.]

Thank you! :-)

[zainul]

You are welcome.
How would you feel if your parents would intervene in this story?

[Amanda J. S.]

hmm.. I din't know... Why? :-)

[zainul]

I remember a famous story about a quarrel between two children whose parents complicated the situation.
But the children befriended again when their parents continued the
quarrel.

[Amanda J. S.]

hmmm... maybe I consider that in a future poem :-)

[zainul]

That would be wonderful,Amanda.

[Amanda J. S.]

:-)

[zainul]

:-)

[Rhianne Ney]

You can fix it by putting it back together... but there will still be marks on it...
This is meaningful and it relates to a relationship as well...
We cannot fix everything without leaving a scar...
Good write (:

[Amanda J. S.]

Thank you! :-)

[Rhianne Ney]

No problem

[RickyLevick]

that horrible :(
very well written i truly felt for ya

[Amanda J. S.]

For one second, I thought you said the poem was horrible!

Lol, Thanks :-)

[RickyLevick]

lmao it is
JKJK

[Amanda J. S.]

:-)

[RickyLevick]

:3 review mine please?

[Amanda J. S.]

Sure :-)

[RickyLevick]

thanks so much :)

[Domo]

The biggest thing when writing a piece is knowing that no two persons will see it the same way. When I personally read this and compared it to my rite of passage, or my life in general, I thought of how the simple trust you give to someone could lead to the shattering of what you see as the most immaculate thing in your life. To me the doll represents a heart, or a relationship, whereas to someone else it could be a representation of their family splitting apart all because of one person's choice to disobey the trust they were given. Bravo on letting me live in a poem once again.

[Amanda J. S.]

Thank you for once again making my day! I really love reading your reviews!

[Speak in Silence]

Wow this is amazing. Good luck :)

[Amanda J. S.]

Thank you!

[Speak in Silence]

You're welcome :)

[linear]

Shattered hearts to easily broken, fragile feelings mistreated by those you thought could only love, as you love, this poem can be read in many different lights, many shades, its a good poem for one so young to write....welll done. :O)

[Amanda J. S.]

Thank you! It means a lot to me! :-)

[linear]

You are most welcome my young friend :O)

[Amanda J. S.]

:-)

[green dreams]

It's a really good hint that shows clearly, ' no friend is actually a true friend '.

[Amanda J. S.]

Yeah, something like that :-)

[green dreams]

Very nice writing, truly.

[Amanda J. S.]

Thank you do much! :-)

[Dr. Wood ?]

see? this is really good, you could work on it a bit but that could be said for most of my stuff, you get the jealousy in there and you do not beat around the bush.
This poem shows the way that REAL kids feel....There is a lot of confusion inside a young childs head