Tell Me

More raw emotions..

Promised myself I wouldn't,
For him, I won't cry,
I thought I could be strong,
But here, on the floor... I lie.

I can't stop myself,
I have to calm down somehow,
I need to stop being weak,
I need to stop, right now.

All the shaky actions,
Insecurity is shining through,
The littlest things set me off,
Because I'm thinking of you.

I won't ever have closure,
'Til I know what I did wrong,
I can't stop the tears,
And I can't yet move on.

Something inside of me,
Has to know what I did...
Tell me what I did wrong,
Then of me, you may be rid.

I want to move on,
To find a real, loving guy,
Who loves me, only me,
And doesn't tell lie after lie.

Yes, tears fall down my face,
But not because I miss you.
Simply because, I never could see,
That your love for me wasn't true.

Reviews

[The Invisible Girl]

This poem is really good! It's packed with raw emotions.
My word of advice: Everything will be alright in the end! I promise you it probably wasn't your fault. If you need anyone to vent out your feeling you can message me or just write more well-written poems. Whatever suits you. :)
100/100

-Invisible Girl :)

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Hahaha, thank you, invisible girl (:

[The Invisible Girl]

You're welcome! :D

[babygirl]

Nice write I like it and tomorrow will be a better day for you

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Thank you!

[babygirl]

Your welcome

[Ahmad Cox]

Aww hug. It definitely isn't your fault and you never have to feel somehow bad or weak for feeling the emotions you are feeling right now. I hope that you are able to get the resolution you need.

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Thanks Ahmad.

[Muhammad Qasim]

i have been reading many poems recently and most of yours are of heartbreak!! i said in another review that you break in order to know the one who is there to heal you...you will find the one so dont worry!

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Haha, yeah, sorry about all those :/ it's just what's on my mind when I write. And I'm trying to be happy, I'm getting there (:

[Muhammad Qasim]

wel best of luck! you wil get there :)

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Thank you (:

[Muhammad Qasim]

no problem :)

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

sad but true another tale another you

[Falling Leaf.]

Buongiorno,
This was interesting, packed with emotions. Some of the rhymes were a little forced but notwithstanding it was divine.
Arrivederci!

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Thanks, Savannah!

[Falling Leaf.]

No trouble at all

[Chris]

i love it

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

I'm glad (:

[Baby Ricochet]

Maybe the only thing you did wrong was fall for a playa

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Yeah :/

[Ohhhwillow]

This is packed with bare emotion, and I know myself this feeling. You're very young, but hey you can't put an age on love. I guess either he'll realise you're worth it, or you'll realise he's not. It takes a hundred broken hearts before you find someone who'll fix it fully, hold on in there, good job. :)

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Thank you, Willow!

[s y e]

Wow. This is such a lovely poem. Filled with raw emotion. This has been beautifully written.

It will get better. It does. I mean it. I'm here if you wanna chat :-)

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Thank you (:

[s y e]

welcome! :-)

[Kunal Tandon]

This is a good poem!

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Thanks!