No More Heartbreak

Just.. Writing. About.. Stuff. So yeah, tell me what you think.

I have poured my heart out,

My secrets have all been told,

I thought I was special,

You acted like I was gold.

 

That's the problem though,

It was all just an act,

My tears started streaming,

Couldn't help but react.

 

Many times over,

My heart has been broken,

My heart has been stolen,

And kept as a token.

 

I thought I was in love,

But I was completely wrong,

I feel stupid now,

Should've seen it all along.

 

It took true love, though,

To help me realize my mistake,

No longer will I fall for it,

Hopefully no more heartbreak.

Reviews

[quinfinn]

such a sweet and wonderfully constructed write, this is an improvement over previous writes...so much more real emotion and not as much unconnected feeling. i think you need to keep writing and hone your skills, because there is a flame of talent burning within you which should not be denied. well done, Amandaaa!!!

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Thank you!

[DoNt LoSe YoUrSeLf]

You shouldn't feel stupid for falling in love...we can't help who we fall for, whether it's the right person or not. We give our hearts when we fall and we can't fail to stop it because then we think we aren't doing enough. We want to be happy, but falling in love isn't stupid...it makes us happy and keeps us sane...it's okay to fall in love for alittle while, as long as we're happy and feel worthy for just awhile.

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Thank you!

[Ahmad Cox]

Hug. So sweet and honest and so full of emotion. I could feel your longing for resolution and and to let go in every line.

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Thank you, Ahmad.

[Janice Fronek(red.panda..]

:'( so powerful and emotional, I know the feeling of loving someone and you think they love you but they just played with your heart to see if you'll break... A very good right tho

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Yeah, I think many people can relate, sadly :( but thank you.

[Janice Fronek(red.panda)]

your welcome sweetie

[Lino Rie]

Love your poem.

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Thanks

[Lewis Davis-Norman]

Love sucks, poetry rules

[Kunal Tandon]

Nice one!

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Thanks!

[Aehr]

The reader can feel your emotions here, Amanda. You've done a pretty good job! :) The last stanza is the best! I just hope you're okay now. :) A good write.

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Yes, I'm fine, thank you (:

[Aehr]

:D glad to hear that!

[Brittany Zedalis]

This is awesome. Your emotions are shown in your words very well.

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Thank you!

[marie]

great write:) a lot of talent budding here:) congratulations on getting over that immature prick, you'll find the happily ever after God has intended for you:

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Hahaha, thank you Marie.

[marie]

no problem:)

[krish]

great.....now after read out ur's this poem...i can say that u r now climbing a success path....
carry on....great i wish u that god, will bless u......98/100......
HEY....IF U DON'T MIND......GIVE ME A CHANCE TO SAY...:
HAVE A LOOK BELOW..........:-
"NO ,MORE HEART-BREAK ,
THAT WAS HAPPENED MERELY BY MY MISTAKE,
NOW I'WON.T BELIEVE ON ANYONE' EVEN HE IS SQUATE OR ANY DRAKE,
COZ.....I DON'T WANNA NOW AGAIN MY HEART BREAK,
IF SOMEHOW U TRY TO IMPROVE MY THAT MISTAKE,
THEN I'LL SURELY CRACK UR'S FACE,
COZ......I DON'T WANNA HURT MY HEART-BREAK.............."

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Oh, thank you..