No More Heartbreak

Just.. Writing. About.. Stuff. So yeah, tell me what you think.

I have poured my heart out,

My secrets have all been told,

I thought I was special,

You acted like I was gold.

 

That's the problem though,

It was all just an act,

My tears started streaming,

Couldn't help but react.

 

Many times over,

My heart has been broken,

My heart has been stolen,

And kept as a token.

 

I thought I was in love,

But I was completely wrong,

I feel stupid now,

Should've seen it all along.

 

It took true love, though,

To help me realize my mistake,

No longer will I fall for it,

Hopefully no more heartbreak.

Reviews

[quinfinn]

such a sweet and wonderfully constructed write, this is an improvement over previous writes...so much more real emotion and not as much unconnected feeling. i think you need to keep writing and hone your skills, because there is a flame of talent burning within you which should not be denied. well done, Amandaaa!!!

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Thank you!

[Rahul]

Love always hurt it's true bcoz, love;s a truth and truth always hurt!
Your this awesome Heartbreak write breaks my heart too, i felt bad about you if you really got heart break or break up with someone... well, you've too think tht you're the not one on this world who got hurt everyday .. in everyminu. too many folks get some hurt but depends on ;em hhow they stand up after fall in love on the ground and in the life....
awesome write, you've made from brroken heart..1010/100.

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Thank you so much Rahul! (: I'm really glad that you liked it, and yes, this write is kind of just my raw emotions thrown into a poem.

[Crystal Marie Dreier]

I know this feeling a little to well, it hurts knowing you fell for someone who does not feel the same or hurts you cause they want revenge.

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

It REALLY does. However, I am better now. I'm sorry for the delayed reply.. I just now got back on the site. Thanks!

[Wonderful Letdown]

Wow. Within all of the pain, there's a glimmer of hope. Something that you see, but many people don't. Very good.

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Thank you so much (:

[bryandc15]

emotional piece..... intriguing title:)

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Haha, thanks :P

[bryandc15]

No problem amandaaa

[CreativeStroke]

A sweet, poetic construction you have here. Your talent always escapes in the most brilliant ways with your poems. Thank you for sharing another heartfelt piece!

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Awww, you're too sweet, haha (:

[Muhammad Qasim]

nice write and you have described your emotions beautifully in there!

hearts do break by many people but in the end it is because they broke that u know the one who can heal it!!

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Yes, that's true. Thank you!

[Muhammad Qasim]

U r welcome!

[scripted]

this is the part after the relationship where you begin to realize that you're not the problem... i love the strength this write shows. this had a very powerful feel to it:) thank you for sharing yours truely Danielle

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Thank you Danielle (:

[Icelanna]

Aww, again very sweet and emotive. I can feel the sadness because it is so raw - i can imagine you feeling this way when your writing it, with tears and tissues everywhere, it's what happens to me when I write painful pieces. You're so talented!
Love to you x

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Thank you, Icelanna, that's very sweet of you (: but haha, yes, I was crying when I wrote all of these recent poems, I just don't bother to wipe the tears from my eyes anymore, it wastes too many tissues, haha.

[Annabelle Lee]

oh. sweet. no more heart break... i drink to that.

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Hahaha (:

[C.C. Marx]

Amanda: if he hurts you, know he is not worth your time. Find that boy who treats you like a queen, who loves you regardless, who has seen you at your worst and didn't run away but instead helped you through the hard times. He's out there, just keep looking. Great piece :)

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Aww, haha, thank you. This particular one was actually about past relationships, but I've just been in a depressing mood lately. Haha, but anyways, thanks again (:

[C.C. Marx]

My pleasure, remember never settle. Been there lets just say id rather stay single than go back