Just some thoughts / feelings that I kind of put into a poem.. I'm not sure about it, but if you decide to take the time to read it, thanks (:
Christmas lights line the street,
Tons of presents under the tree,
All I can think of is him, though,
And wonder if he's thinking of me.
It's our first winter together,
Our love will soon be a year old,
But he isn't here with me,
Cuddling me all through the cold...
The season is oh so joyful,
There are smiles everywhere,
But all I do is watch from afar,
And wish that I could be somewhere...
Enjoying his comfort and warmth,
His strong, but pleasant arms,
His perfect smile and adorable laugh...
With him keeping me from all harm...
I can't though, so I just sit and watch,
Taking in all the happiness around,
Then I think of the true love of my life,
Who isn't near enough to be found...
Amanda...... you carry the weight of love upon a mind that protects it by the very fact that it does not consume you. It keeps you. It grows with you, and through your poems, even WE can see it. What hand should hold yours to call it so, for his does not seem or allow itself to be known as anything less than perfect when in your company. You are so beautiful. I saw that Sheila has said it perfectly, what I would love to say, and it is on good faith that how you write your poems, and how special you are to him, to us, to me........... is evident and strong!! Great timing for the holiday season, to write a poem with an incredible heart scribing it for you!! *kiss to your forehead* Beautiful job, Amanda. xoxo -Mark
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11 Years Ago
Awwww, you're so sweet, Mark. Thank you (: yes, he seems definitely seeks pretty perfect to me. I'm .. read moreAwwww, you're so sweet, Mark. Thank you (: yes, he seems definitely seeks pretty perfect to me. I'm really glad that you enjoyed this, and I hope that you had a wonderful holiday season.
It's a very lovely poem. You can feel the longing for the one you love and the sadness of not being able to be with him....but there's also a sense of hope. Like the separation is only temporary. Anyways, very well done.
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11 Years Ago
I believe that you understood the poem perfectly (: and thank you!
Awesome poem. Wish I could tell you more but my love for anything at the moment is looked behind a cage made from the worries of grades, thoughts, and Emotions that aren't easy to brake down.
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11 Years Ago
I know what you mean. Fortunately, I've been able to keep that cage from overpowering me, and I was .. read moreI know what you mean. Fortunately, I've been able to keep that cage from overpowering me, and I was able to fall in love (:
Very beautiful and sweet poem. I really enjoyed it.
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11 Years Ago
Thank you, I'm so glad you enjoyed it (:
11 Years Ago
No problem. I have enjoyed reading your poems. You have a very nice and unique writing style I appre.. read moreNo problem. I have enjoyed reading your poems. You have a very nice and unique writing style I appreciate
Amanda...... you carry the weight of love upon a mind that protects it by the very fact that it does not consume you. It keeps you. It grows with you, and through your poems, even WE can see it. What hand should hold yours to call it so, for his does not seem or allow itself to be known as anything less than perfect when in your company. You are so beautiful. I saw that Sheila has said it perfectly, what I would love to say, and it is on good faith that how you write your poems, and how special you are to him, to us, to me........... is evident and strong!! Great timing for the holiday season, to write a poem with an incredible heart scribing it for you!! *kiss to your forehead* Beautiful job, Amanda. xoxo -Mark
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
Awwww, you're so sweet, Mark. Thank you (: yes, he seems definitely seeks pretty perfect to me. I'm .. read moreAwwww, you're so sweet, Mark. Thank you (: yes, he seems definitely seeks pretty perfect to me. I'm really glad that you enjoyed this, and I hope that you had a wonderful holiday season.
"With him keeping me from all harm..." I think your flow would be perfect in this piece if you removed the word 'all'. That is strictly my opinion so please don't feel the need to change it if you want it to stay put.
I love reading your work :)
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Hahahaha, thanks (: and I'll definitely think about it.
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