This poem is exquisitely beautiful! I love the way you've described the wonderful feeling that floods you when you are in love :)
The rhyming scheme elevates this poem and makes it stand out as a ringing memory in the reader's mind.
The last stanza was great, it concluded the poem very well. Keep writing!
This poem is just too naive. It's innocent, but naive. Everything doesn't always end well. Especially in a relationship when there's only the two of you who knows about it. I know. I've been there. Love will always end sooner or later. No love lasts eternal. They will always find a reason to stop caring, to stop loving you. Everything that starts in love will always end in heartbreaks. Live your life like this poem, and you'd be miserable for the rest of your life. You may think that living those moments would be worth the pain and suffering afterwards, but it's not. Anyways, back to the literary review: the diction is pretty simple and the tone is fairly straightforward. The theme and point of view is focused.
In conclusion: The content is idiotically naive but the writing is fairly decent.
Your words just give love the most beautiful wings! You're very aware of the darkness that can come, but also of the stronger light that true love can shine... There is a sweetness in your expressions that is a pure exampe for us all... Thank you for always making life and love seem like the best treasure in the world!
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Awwww, thank you Craig (: and it's no problem at all!
I'm a fourteen year old who knows absolutely nothing about writing, but I try to make the best of it.
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