Together Forever

Together Forever

A Poem by Amandaaa Caroline (:

Talking to him,

Right before bed,

Blush-colored cheeks,

Thoughts in my head.

 

Could life be better?

I don't think so.

Any needed changes?

My answer is no.

 

I'm truly happy in life,

And completely in love,

Everyday I thank God,

For my gift from above.

 

He's everything to me,

My life and my world,

My complete happiness,

I'll always be his girl.

 

We're happily in love,

But no one else knows,

So people still flirt,

And anything goes...

 

Sometimes I don't like it,

But it's better this way,

People won't start drama,

And together we can stay.

 

We've been through lots,

But we're stronger now,

We'll be together forever,

I know we will, some how...

© 2012 Amandaaa Caroline (:


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AK
This poem is exquisitely beautiful! I love the way you've described the wonderful feeling that floods you when you are in love :)
The rhyming scheme elevates this poem and makes it stand out as a ringing memory in the reader's mind.
The last stanza was great, it concluded the poem very well. Keep writing!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Amandaaa Caroline (:

11 Years Ago

Awwww, thank you so much AK (:
AK

11 Years Ago

My pleasure, Amanda :)



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aawww amanda, you make me want a boyfriend even more than i already do!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Amandaaa Caroline (:

11 Years Ago

Hahahahaa, you'll find him, I'm sure of it(: I love your profile picture by the way!
beautiful dreamer

11 Years Ago

thansk my friend took it :) shes a great photographer
Awwww! So sweet.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Amandaaa Caroline (:

11 Years Ago

Thanks!
This poem is just too naive. It's innocent, but naive. Everything doesn't always end well. Especially in a relationship when there's only the two of you who knows about it. I know. I've been there. Love will always end sooner or later. No love lasts eternal. They will always find a reason to stop caring, to stop loving you. Everything that starts in love will always end in heartbreaks. Live your life like this poem, and you'd be miserable for the rest of your life. You may think that living those moments would be worth the pain and suffering afterwards, but it's not. Anyways, back to the literary review: the diction is pretty simple and the tone is fairly straightforward. The theme and point of view is focused.

In conclusion: The content is idiotically naive but the writing is fairly decent.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Amandaaa Caroline (:

11 Years Ago

Thanks for the criticism.
Aw ! This is very sweet . Great job Amanda !

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Amandaaa Caroline (:

11 Years Ago

Thanks!
Moon

11 Years Ago

You are welcome :)
aww you can so tell your in love whom ever this guy is, Is really lucky too have you! Great write Amanda!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Amandaaa Caroline (:

11 Years Ago

Awwww, thank you so much Kelsey(:
Lover Of Words

11 Years Ago

My pleasure!
Your words just give love the most beautiful wings! You're very aware of the darkness that can come, but also of the stronger light that true love can shine... There is a sweetness in your expressions that is a pure exampe for us all... Thank you for always making life and love seem like the best treasure in the world!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Amandaaa Caroline (:

11 Years Ago

Awwww, thank you Craig (: and it's no problem at all!
This is really sweet!
I like how good the thoughts sounded together and the message of love is marked in your every word
Keep it up!
-Penelope H.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Amandaaa Caroline (:

11 Years Ago

Thanks so much!

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Amandaaa Caroline (:
Amandaaa Caroline (:

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