7 stanzas, 7 stanzas, lol I think HE proves to be the lucky one. His girl is above her own emotions that still have to try and perfect what she ALSO fears and lives for, and all the while........... he is dedicated to Amanda, and does not play the role of a shy dotard. He loves, you respond, and WE get to experience that smallest little insight into what we receive in poem form. Wonderful job!! Beautiful Amanda. xoxo -Mark
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11 Years Ago
Awwww, I'm so glad that you enjoyed it, Mark. Your reviews always make my day (: I know how you don'.. read moreAwwww, I'm so glad that you enjoyed it, Mark. Your reviews always make my day (: I know how you don't like poems with seven stanzas, I thought about you when I wrote this, wondering whether you would read it or not. Hahaha. I couldn't find a way to end the poem in six stanzas though, so I had to add that last one to wrap it all up. I'm glad that you did end up reading it though. Thanks again (:
11 Years Ago
Maybe, it's because it is still early in the morning or Dunkin' Donuts spiked my OJ, but my eyes are.. read moreMaybe, it's because it is still early in the morning or Dunkin' Donuts spiked my OJ, but my eyes are welling after reading that you thought of me at one point!! I have thrown away poems of mine that had 7 stanzas and stretched other ones, too. You pack the cutest, sweetest, and most effecting sugary punches in your poems, Amanda!! xoxo -Mark
11 Years Ago
Awwwww, of course I thought of you, I'm always hoping that you'll read my new poems, I love your fee.. read moreAwwwww, of course I thought of you, I'm always hoping that you'll read my new poems, I love your feedback (: and thank you Mark, I'm glad you think so!
I think as long as we are coming to you as true fans, that we have an obligation to nurture what we .. read moreI think as long as we are coming to you as true fans, that we have an obligation to nurture what we see and hear in your poems, and allow for it to consume us willingly, and wholly!! Amanda, I can't remember knowing a girl that has that AMOUNT of conviction or talent to do such a thing when I hit that age myself. I knew painters, skaters, and girls who were good at sports, but I don't remember them having so much passion to pursue how incredible they KNEW they were, like you do, and WE get to WATCH you do...... Besides enjoying your poems, it really is a lot of fun to see your poems, and listen to how that heart of yours accepts front stage to to call OURS!! You are a beautiful poet, Amanda, and I'm still in the phase of trying to shorten my "comments"!! lol xoxo -Mark
11 Years Ago
Hahahahahahah, I know what you mean by the shortening comments thing, but I like your long comments,.. read moreHahahahahahah, I know what you mean by the shortening comments thing, but I like your long comments, they make me feel like you don't mind taking the time to write so much while talking to me. I'm glad to hear that you consider yourself a true fan of mine (: and yes, I often get told that I don't act or seem my age, hahahah. I'm glad that you have fun reading my poems and as you say, "listening to how my heart accepts front stage", hahaha(: I just write from the heart, whatever comes to me. I don't really know anything about all the technicalities of writing, and I'm fine with that.. I can write from my heart and not have to worry about anything else (: I'm happy to hear that you enjoy that!
11 Years Ago
That very comment of yours is why ANYONE would WANT to follow you. A most strange world we live in t.. read moreThat very comment of yours is why ANYONE would WANT to follow you. A most strange world we live in to not take the time to examine why our hearts feel as they do. When I was in grade school I had no friends, and the ones I DID have, were allowed to abuse me in some of the worst ways that would be a little tough to attempt the write to poem. Everyone liked me and I had no capacity to accept it. If there is a chance that one day on here, YOU find yourself bounding across waves like such, then your "fans" and targets for your smiles will help keep you at your best and help remind you how important you ARE to keep in touch!! xoxo -Mark
Wow, what a beautiful poem about finding the right one. And that is a hard mission, you took the words out of my mouth about how I feel about the man I'm in love with right now. Thanks for writing. =)
You are welcome and really I have found someone like that . Sadly , it has taken till about a couple.. read moreYou are welcome and really I have found someone like that . Sadly , it has taken till about a couple of hours ago for me to figure it out .
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Oh I gotcha. Well, at least now you've realized it (:
7 stanzas, 7 stanzas, lol I think HE proves to be the lucky one. His girl is above her own emotions that still have to try and perfect what she ALSO fears and lives for, and all the while........... he is dedicated to Amanda, and does not play the role of a shy dotard. He loves, you respond, and WE get to experience that smallest little insight into what we receive in poem form. Wonderful job!! Beautiful Amanda. xoxo -Mark
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
Awwww, I'm so glad that you enjoyed it, Mark. Your reviews always make my day (: I know how you don'.. read moreAwwww, I'm so glad that you enjoyed it, Mark. Your reviews always make my day (: I know how you don't like poems with seven stanzas, I thought about you when I wrote this, wondering whether you would read it or not. Hahaha. I couldn't find a way to end the poem in six stanzas though, so I had to add that last one to wrap it all up. I'm glad that you did end up reading it though. Thanks again (:
11 Years Ago
Maybe, it's because it is still early in the morning or Dunkin' Donuts spiked my OJ, but my eyes are.. read moreMaybe, it's because it is still early in the morning or Dunkin' Donuts spiked my OJ, but my eyes are welling after reading that you thought of me at one point!! I have thrown away poems of mine that had 7 stanzas and stretched other ones, too. You pack the cutest, sweetest, and most effecting sugary punches in your poems, Amanda!! xoxo -Mark
11 Years Ago
Awwwww, of course I thought of you, I'm always hoping that you'll read my new poems, I love your fee.. read moreAwwwww, of course I thought of you, I'm always hoping that you'll read my new poems, I love your feedback (: and thank you Mark, I'm glad you think so!
I think as long as we are coming to you as true fans, that we have an obligation to nurture what we .. read moreI think as long as we are coming to you as true fans, that we have an obligation to nurture what we see and hear in your poems, and allow for it to consume us willingly, and wholly!! Amanda, I can't remember knowing a girl that has that AMOUNT of conviction or talent to do such a thing when I hit that age myself. I knew painters, skaters, and girls who were good at sports, but I don't remember them having so much passion to pursue how incredible they KNEW they were, like you do, and WE get to WATCH you do...... Besides enjoying your poems, it really is a lot of fun to see your poems, and listen to how that heart of yours accepts front stage to to call OURS!! You are a beautiful poet, Amanda, and I'm still in the phase of trying to shorten my "comments"!! lol xoxo -Mark
11 Years Ago
Hahahahahahah, I know what you mean by the shortening comments thing, but I like your long comments,.. read moreHahahahahahah, I know what you mean by the shortening comments thing, but I like your long comments, they make me feel like you don't mind taking the time to write so much while talking to me. I'm glad to hear that you consider yourself a true fan of mine (: and yes, I often get told that I don't act or seem my age, hahahah. I'm glad that you have fun reading my poems and as you say, "listening to how my heart accepts front stage", hahaha(: I just write from the heart, whatever comes to me. I don't really know anything about all the technicalities of writing, and I'm fine with that.. I can write from my heart and not have to worry about anything else (: I'm happy to hear that you enjoy that!
11 Years Ago
That very comment of yours is why ANYONE would WANT to follow you. A most strange world we live in t.. read moreThat very comment of yours is why ANYONE would WANT to follow you. A most strange world we live in to not take the time to examine why our hearts feel as they do. When I was in grade school I had no friends, and the ones I DID have, were allowed to abuse me in some of the worst ways that would be a little tough to attempt the write to poem. Everyone liked me and I had no capacity to accept it. If there is a chance that one day on here, YOU find yourself bounding across waves like such, then your "fans" and targets for your smiles will help keep you at your best and help remind you how important you ARE to keep in touch!! xoxo -Mark
This is such a powerful loveable piece, It flows with the passion and innocent emotion you have for this person and you have captured your want and desire for him perfectly!
Like fish need water,
Like people need air,
Forever and always,
I need him to be there.
Perfectly Rendered!
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11 Years Ago
Awwwww, thanks so much, I'm really glad you enjoyed it (:
This is so beautifully written! Every line I read I thought about my fiance and how the relationship between us is. We love each other despite the flaws, mistakes and fights. Thank you for sharing this! It was very well done :)
~Erinne
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11 Years Ago
Awww, thank you, I'm glad that you could relate and that you enjoyed it(:
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