I Promise..

Don't you understand,
I'm always here for you?
Don't you understand,
I care about you too?

I know you feel alone,
You think no one cares,
But truth is I really do,
And I promised to be there.

Anytime you need to,
Know you can talk to me,
I'll always love you for you,
You'll always be my eternity.

Through better or worse,
'Til death does us part,
I promise to you love,
You'll always be my heart..

So please talk to me,
I may not fully get it,
But I promise to listen,
That's enough, isn't it?

Please don't ignore me,
Run away and hide,
Pretend you don't hear me,
Or keep your feelings all inside..

Vent your feelings to me,
Whatever it takes,
Just don't keep hurting,
Or I'll too have heartbreak...

Reviews

[Phillitup]

This is really good although I found a few things I would like to discuss. First off, you pulled off a rhyming poem well but there are a few flow issues. I'll tell them to you so you don't have to search if you choose to fix them. Third stanza, fourth line. I think you should take out always. Fourth stanza, second line. I think you should say do instead of does. Fourth stanza, fourth lines. Same, always. Sixth stanza, fourth line. I think you should take out all. Don;t change them because I say so. Read it through like that and then decide. I think it would help the flow but you can keep it the way it is if you really want to. Again, just my opinion. Nicely and eloquently penned my poetic friend!
Best regards,
Dell

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Thanks for the suggestions, I'll read through it.

[Tomi]

the Importance of communication in all relationships is very important and you have potrayed that in an excellent way. Great work!

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Yes, it really is! Thank you so much(:

[MandaBear]

Very nice. You have such a way with words

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Thank you! (:

[Erinne S.]

I really love reading your work. It always flows so nicely :)

~Erinne

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Awwww, thank you!(: I really love yours too!

[Erinne S.]

Thanks :)

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

No problem(:

[Blue Ivory]

Your poetry is sweet and comforting. You're good with depth. You have a bright future in this field :)

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Thank you so much!

[Lino Rie]

Wonderful piece. Wish there were people like this around here.

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Awwww, thank you, I'm sure you'll find someone(:

[Shreyas Tripathy]

Beautiful and heart touching ! Great poem :)

[Shreyas Tripathy]

Beautiful and heart touching ! Great poem :)

[Shreyas Tripathy]

Beautiful and heart touching ! Great poem :)

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Hahahaha, you commented the same thing three times :P I'll just respond to this one.. Hahhaa. Thank you, it means a lot(:

[Shreyas Tripathy]

Oh! How come ? I dont know hw it got posted thrice

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Hahahahah, I have no clue either.

[Hamza]

The flow and rhyming you draw in your poems, really is worth a mention..
I would say the depth in the understanding and care that you show, reveal your true feelings and this loving nature can mould even a stone...
I could relate this but yours has both impact and pain... This is very beautiful .. And I'd say very sweetly written .. :)

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Thank you so much(:

[An owl on the moon]

You have such a marvelous depth of love and undestanding.. the sweetest tenderness... My, if everyone had your heart there would be no more war. Just love your inspirations... even when they are tinged with the aching of life.

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Awwww, thanks so much Craig(: that means a lot!