Take My Hand

Cuddle with me,
Play with my hair,
Love me forever,
Always be there...

Be proud of me,
Show me to the world,
Tell people of us,
Call me your girl...

Make a promise,
Make it stay true,
Tell me your secrets,
I want you to...

Confide all in me,
I'm your soulmate,
Talk about problems,
All this I'll take...

I'll take your anger,
If you need me to,
Just please be happy,
And not all blue...

Learn to trust me,
I promise you can,
Believe in me love,
Just take my hand...

Reviews

[Patrick Henry]

From playing with your hair, which will get a guy's attention and a girl's understanding, to believing in you and thus, taking your hand? ......perfect!! With all the commas gone, to me, this poem is very very sweet. This is something no one knows about me...lol I can't read a poem that has 7 stanzas. It's the hardest thing ever for me. I think I have even done it to my own poems on one or two!! I saw six..... and was like "Whew!" : ) Great poem!! xoxo -Mark

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Hahahahhaha, thanks so much Mark, I'm really glad that you enjoyed it (:

[Patrick Henry]

It's most inviting and quite the "tell" for me to even notice things about myself long forgotten, to see it so sweetly written out in a way that "sssshhh!!" melts my heart......... I can't HELP but leave a comment. I LOVE your page. I pretend nothing, sometimes forget to breathe for a few lines for some reason, enjoy myself, and allow myself to just get lost inside your poems. There are no crazy words or counting beats, and all the "un-fun" stuff that gets in the way sometimes!! lol I like you, and I hope I get to stay, 'cause I am starting to like this "smiling" thing. I don't smile enough. Your poem, when I read it the first time, had my cheeks hurting when I read:

"Play with my hair,
Love me forever,
Always be there... "

Simple and Gorgeous!! xoxo -Mark

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Aw, thank you! (: This is definitely the best review and comment I've ever gotten, you're too sweet! I'm really flattered that you love my page and enjoy it. You can definitely stay, hahhaa, no one is going to make you leave(: I'm glad that my poetry makes you smile, it's always really nice to hear that, as a writer. Thanks again Mark, it's really sweet of you(:

[Hamza]

wish someone could write such words for me too
it's touching and cute at the same time ...
very impressive :)

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Awwww, thank you(: I'm sure you'll find someone who will, good luck!

[Erinne S.]

This is so cute! I loved the rhyming scheme and the flow. Well done, I loved it!

~Erinne

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Thank you so much(:

[Blue Ivory]

Awwww this is so sweet! Iove it!

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Thanks, I'm glad you enjoyed it(:

[Shreyas Tripathy]

You must be a true lover Amanda! This poem is so raw and crystal clear! Amazing! The potrayal of love is amazing! Great work :)

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Awww, thank you so much(:

[Moon]

Very sweet

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Thanks!

[Moon]

you're welcome

[C.C. Marx]

very lovely I think every teenage girl wishes they could find that one guy who would do anything for them....#singlegirlprobs

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Thanks! &Hahhahahha, I know how you feel :P I was like that for a while. I'm sure you'll find someone amazing for you though! Good luck(:

[C.C. Marx]

I'm guessing somebody is taken! good for you and haha thx all I can do is drool over the hot seniors for now and I'm kinda ok with that

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Hahahahaha, yes I am(: &oh, that works too, hahahah :P

[C.C. Marx]

well good luck to you and well seniors are like celebrities: you know you can't have them but sometimes its just fun to look

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Thank you(: &hahahaha, so true :P good luck to you with finding that special someone! (:

[dunnia]

awww this is sooo sweet and cute i love the last stanza :)

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Awww, thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it! (:

[dunnia]

your welcome :)

[An owl on the moon]

This is the absolute perfect poem to make a relationship thrive... to come alive in tenderness, in trust, in a shared life that always lifts... If everyone just wrote this on their hearts, the world would be transformed. So beautiful!

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Awww, thanks so much Craig! (:

[Tzephanyah Ben Yosef]

I love this, Its sweet cute and playful and full of sweet innocent-yet passionate emotions. a very tender and loving piece.
Shalom~~~

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Thank you!

[Tzephanyah Ben Yosef]

No problem