Take My Hand

Cuddle with me,
Play with my hair,
Love me forever,
Always be there...

Be proud of me,
Show me to the world,
Tell people of us,
Call me your girl...

Make a promise,
Make it stay true,
Tell me your secrets,
I want you to...

Confide all in me,
I'm your soulmate,
Talk about problems,
All this I'll take...

I'll take your anger,
If you need me to,
Just please be happy,
And not all blue...

Learn to trust me,
I promise you can,
Believe in me love,
Just take my hand...

Reviews

[Patrick Henry]

From playing with your hair, which will get a guy's attention and a girl's understanding, to believing in you and thus, taking your hand? ......perfect!! With all the commas gone, to me, this poem is very very sweet. This is something no one knows about me...lol I can't read a poem that has 7 stanzas. It's the hardest thing ever for me. I think I have even done it to my own poems on one or two!! I saw six..... and was like "Whew!" : ) Great poem!! xoxo -Mark

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Hahahahhaha, thanks so much Mark, I'm really glad that you enjoyed it (:

[Patrick Henry]

It's most inviting and quite the "tell" for me to even notice things about myself long forgotten, to see it so sweetly written out in a way that "sssshhh!!" melts my heart......... I can't HELP but leave a comment. I LOVE your page. I pretend nothing, sometimes forget to breathe for a few lines for some reason, enjoy myself, and allow myself to just get lost inside your poems. There are no crazy words or counting beats, and all the "un-fun" stuff that gets in the way sometimes!! lol I like you, and I hope I get to stay, 'cause I am starting to like this "smiling" thing. I don't smile enough. Your poem, when I read it the first time, had my cheeks hurting when I read:

"Play with my hair,
Love me forever,
Always be there... "

Simple and Gorgeous!! xoxo -Mark

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Aw, thank you! (: This is definitely the best review and comment I've ever gotten, you're too sweet! I'm really flattered that you love my page and enjoy it. You can definitely stay, hahhaa, no one is going to make you leave(: I'm glad that my poetry makes you smile, it's always really nice to hear that, as a writer. Thanks again Mark, it's really sweet of you(:

[Carson Scott]

Great poem. You are very talented! :)

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Awwww, thank you so much! (:

[R.M.W.]

Especially love the 2nd to last verse
"I'll take your anger,
If you need me to,
Just please be happy,
And not all blue..."

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Awww. Thanks, I'm glad you enjoyed it(:

[Kelsey]

A wonderful flow and a beautiful poem, I'm rather impressed. Nicely done. x

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Thank you so much, I'm really glad you enjoyed it(:

[MandaBear]

Very heartfelt very nice.

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Thanks (:

[Lover Of Words]

Lovelt

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Thanks.

[BMarcel85]

Beautifully written Amanda. Again, the rhythm to this is amazing, especially for your age. Keep Writing!...

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Thanks so much, that means a lot!(:

[Lino Rie]

Love it!^-^

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

I'm so glad!

[Not Your Typical New Yo..]

Wow. It's very nice to see what goes through a girl's head when she wants to be in a relationship. This is extremely touching and romantic. May you keep on writting brilliantly :)

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Awwww, thank you! (:

[Talal Hussain]

well not a big fan of soft compositions but your skill makes me say that's awesome stuff :-)

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Awww. Thank you, that means a lot(: