It Was JUST A Dream

Our conversations leave me speechless,
Just because of his voice,
It's the most beautiful sound...
Enough to make angels rejoice.

His breathtaking smile drives me crazy,
All I can do is stare,
And every day at 11:11,
I wish that I could be there..

His arms are always strong and safe,
There nothing can bother me,
They always keep me warm and happy,
Every second of eternity.

My dreams that I wish wouldn't end,
Because of the look in his eyes,
I wish it could be reality,
But I wake up and then realize...

Reviews

[Ravyne Hawke]

Beautiful enduring poem. You are getting closer and closer to the "showing" of a poem instead of the telling of a poem; the last line of the first stanza, for example. Very showing. I think once you get used to using metaphors and similes, you will be able to show your feelings more. I like the concept of 11:11 being a time for wishing. I've also heard that it is a very spiritual time, 11 being an angelic number, which would tie it back to the angelic use in the first stanza. Then there is the use of eternity.. again, very spiritual, very angelic.. and I like the abrupt ending.. because isn't reality like that sometimes? very abrupt and shockingly real. Very good poem overall. You are doing so well with your writing!

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Awwww, thank you so much, it really means a lot to hear that(:

[Ravyne Hawke]

You are most welcome Amanda. I am enjoying watching you grow with your poetry.

[Tasha]

This is a great write. You portrayed emptiness well.

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Thanks so much(:

[Tasha]

You're welcome. I loved it.

[Jordan's Back]

Awe I really like the emptiness you feel in this. You portray it well, Wonderful write.

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Thank youu!

[Jordan's Back]

AND ITS A WONDERFUL POEM AND YOU BETTER NOT DELETE IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
:p

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Grrrrr. You're so unfair :P

[Jordan's Back]

no im not, Its AWESOME and to proove it, Ima send it to all my friends

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

You're insane :P