It Was JUST A Dream

Our conversations leave me speechless,
Just because of his voice,
It's the most beautiful sound...
Enough to make angels rejoice.

His breathtaking smile drives me crazy,
All I can do is stare,
And every day at 11:11,
I wish that I could be there..

His arms are always strong and safe,
There nothing can bother me,
They always keep me warm and happy,
Every second of eternity.

My dreams that I wish wouldn't end,
Because of the look in his eyes,
I wish it could be reality,
But I wake up and then realize...

Reviews

[Ravyne Hawke]

Beautiful enduring poem. You are getting closer and closer to the "showing" of a poem instead of the telling of a poem; the last line of the first stanza, for example. Very showing. I think once you get used to using metaphors and similes, you will be able to show your feelings more. I like the concept of 11:11 being a time for wishing. I've also heard that it is a very spiritual time, 11 being an angelic number, which would tie it back to the angelic use in the first stanza. Then there is the use of eternity.. again, very spiritual, very angelic.. and I like the abrupt ending.. because isn't reality like that sometimes? very abrupt and shockingly real. Very good poem overall. You are doing so well with your writing!

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Awwww, thank you so much, it really means a lot to hear that(:

[Ravyne Hawke]

You are most welcome Amanda. I am enjoying watching you grow with your poetry.

[Chance]

Tell me you realize it is 11:11 again! Great concept. Tell me about your choice of 11:11.
Personally I like more for less and and would remove nearly every "I" "They" "There" and "My." But that is my style and we all need to find our own.
You have a very innocent voice and style in the poem that I find endearing. Please keep writing and posting and thanks for the read.

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

They say you're supposed to make a wish at 11:11 every day, hahaha, so that's what I meant by that. &thanks for the criticism, I'm still very new to writing and trying to find my own style, so yeah. Thanks for the read &review(:

[InsanityWriter]

This is really good. ^_^

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Thank you(:

[Tunder]

Bitter-sweet. The sweetness of being loved, and loving, and the bitterness of leaving it behind in a dream. Well done :)
100/100

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Thank you so much!(: I'm so glad you liked it!

[Hidden Secret]

Great poem, i loved it, great wording, feeling, AWESOME! i loved it!

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Awwww, thank you so much(:

[Hidden Secret]

ur welcome, i can tell tht it came STRAIT from the heart, loved it, A+
:)

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Awww, it really did, thank you(:

[Hidden Secret]

ur welcome :)

[Kelsey]

This is so beautiful and sweet. It really puts the writer at ease, helping them feel the love you feel for the person. Wonderful job, my dear. :)

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Awwww, thank you so much, that means a lot(: I'm glad you enjoyed it!

[unknown]

It's another gorgeous poem. I loved this one. :)

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Awww, thanks so much(:

[soliloquy]

Very, very nice....i love this...

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Awww, thank you, I'm glad(:

[:-)]

Aw...! This is really adorable. You can really feel the longing. It's very well written, has nice flow.

Awesome job.

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Thank you so much, I'm glad you enjoyed it(: thanks for the read &review too!

[:-)]

No problem! You've got talent.

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Awww, thanks(: that's nice to hear, I'm really new to this, haha.

[Steven Cash]

Wonderful

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Thanks(:

[An owl on the moon]

Your words lift like wings.. the wonder.. the love.. the joy he brings.. And then your last lines are so painfully bittersweet.. the agony of realizing that what should be the most amazing reality is just a dream... The words stun.

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Thank you Craig, that's how I wanted it to seem, I'm glad it came through that way(: