My True Love Is..

My true love is,

The one who is there for me,

Through everything.

 

My true love is,

The one who loves me for me,

Regardless.

 

My true love is,

The one who can put a smile on my face,

Always.

 

My true love is,

The one who makes my heart beat faster,

Just with his voice.

 

My true love is,

The one who keeps me strong,

When I can’t.

 

My true love is,

The one who puts up with my mistakes,

And forgives.

 

My true love is,

The one who will stay with me forever,

‘til death does us part.

Reviews

[Ravyne Hawke]

Hello Amanda, so glad you have brought your writing to Writers Cafe. I can honestly say that what you have written here is emotional and to the point. You've written this by "telling" us who your true love is, which is fine, but there is no meat to it. Since you have asked for criticism, I will give you the only piece of advice (I don't think this is critical) that as a poet for the better of 30+ years that I can. Show me the one you love.. I don't want to be told who your love is, I want to see for myself. Give your love emotions, color, action, description.. use metaphors or similes. Dig in deep to your own emotions and pull your love forth from the depths of your heart.

I hope this makes sense. And don't worry what you have written really is a fine poem. I have so many just like it from my early days as a poet. I do hope you will continue writing. Read poetry, write poetry, develop your skill because just like everything in this life, all you need is practice! Best wishes to you and your continued work.

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Thanks for the criticism, I'll work on it. (:

[An owl on the moon]

So tender and beautiful... your words sing of a love that brings you life... and a love that lasts for your lifeime... Wish everyone had what you've described... I think war might disappear...

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Thank you so much(: I also wish everyone could have this type of love and be this happy.

[luna11]

Great poem, well written. It has a good flow and rhythm. Well done :)

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Thank you (:

[Chris Rampersad]

It has a pretty decent rhythm to it. Enjoyable and full of emotion.

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

thanks!

[Jordan's Back]

Another Wonderful Write. Rhythm and Affection Flows with grace and It shows the true personification of Love! Excellent write!

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

thank youu(:

[Jordan's Back]

Always... Your a Damn good Writer!

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

whatever :P but thanks.. (:

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

I really love this especially the ending stanza. I really like this part here too:
"My true love is,

The one who makes my heart beat faster,

Just with his voice."

Very good poem, really enjoyed.

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Aww, thanks so much (:

[Steven Cash]

Great job, beautiful

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Thank you! (: