My True Love Is..

My true love is,

The one who is there for me,

Through everything.

 

My true love is,

The one who loves me for me,

Regardless.

 

My true love is,

The one who can put a smile on my face,

Always.

 

My true love is,

The one who makes my heart beat faster,

Just with his voice.

 

My true love is,

The one who keeps me strong,

When I can’t.

 

My true love is,

The one who puts up with my mistakes,

And forgives.

 

My true love is,

The one who will stay with me forever,

‘til death does us part.

Reviews

[Ravyne Hawke]

Hello Amanda, so glad you have brought your writing to Writers Cafe. I can honestly say that what you have written here is emotional and to the point. You've written this by "telling" us who your true love is, which is fine, but there is no meat to it. Since you have asked for criticism, I will give you the only piece of advice (I don't think this is critical) that as a poet for the better of 30+ years that I can. Show me the one you love.. I don't want to be told who your love is, I want to see for myself. Give your love emotions, color, action, description.. use metaphors or similes. Dig in deep to your own emotions and pull your love forth from the depths of your heart.

I hope this makes sense. And don't worry what you have written really is a fine poem. I have so many just like it from my early days as a poet. I do hope you will continue writing. Read poetry, write poetry, develop your skill because just like everything in this life, all you need is practice! Best wishes to you and your continued work.

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Thanks for the criticism, I'll work on it. (:

[Lino Rie]

Oh, This makes my heart swell with emotion. I wish i could experience true love.

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

I'm sure you'll find someone(: thanks for the read &review!

[Lino Rie]

No prob. maybe you can review one of mine some day.

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

I will(: feel free to send me read requests too, with any of your writing. I probably enjoy romance the most, but i'll read anything(:

[Lina Grey]

If I were to base my true love off this, I'd be in love with every friend I've got...and I've got a lot :P Great that you were able to find someone realllly special though, with that little something extra. This is a great piece, but I really agree with Lori about how you should add more depth and complexity to your work. Make the reader feel it just as well as you do. Make it apply to the one and only, not to every friend who truely cares about you. Great job, and keep it up! :)

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

I enjoyed reading this poem. :3
I can relate to it, but that's a good thing. Thanks for sharing. :3

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Hahahaha, thank youu (:

[Angie Diane♥♥]

No problem :D

[unknown]

It's a very beautiful, and very honest poem, and it's beautiful, Amanda. I'm glad that you wrote this, and it definitely fits you to a perfection. Don't worry about anything else, and continue to write! :) It's beautiful. :)

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Awww, thank you, that's so sweet of you to say (:

[unknown]

Don't worry about it. :) It's something that every poet is going to go through is the self-doubt, and the worry of whether someone is going to like it, but your poems are honest, and very much truthful to a tee, and there's nothing wrong with that. You've done a splendid job of making these poems, and you should definitely keep up the good work. You'll be a world renowned author one day, and I'll be asking for an autograph. :) Keep it up.

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Awww, thank you (: &thanks so much for taking the time to review this!

[unknown]

It's not even a problem. I enjoy reading great writing

[Crystal Marie Dreier]

This is really good, I agree with everything you said in this poem. It was really good and I hope to read more like this.

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Awwww, thanks so much(:

[kally]

I love it :) Expecially the last line :D i use that alot

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Thanks so much(:

[Karen666]

so true