jack and jill

In honor of my contest I decided to do a spin off of the Jack and Jill poem. I made it more of a fairy tale. Sorry that its really long.

Jack was 16 when he saw her the love of his life. He knew he would  probable never see her again because he was just a poor farm hand and she was a beautiful princess but he had to try. He left the day after he saw her never to be seen again. This is the story of Jack and Jill.

Jill was 14 when she lost her parents to the sea. She was wearing black to show her loss when she meet him. The carriage she was riding in to her parents funeral was very old and about ready to break but she wanted to take that one because it was the one her parents always used. They were on a very hazerdous road and she was worried the carriage was going to collaspe when it suddenly stopped for no reason she could see. She was about to tell the driver to keep going  but then she heard a gun shot she got out of the carriage as fast as she could there were three bandits standing over the body of her driver looking for gold.

 Then the one closest to her grabbed her by her hair and said," Looks like we got lucky boys we now have a fair maiden and enough money to live out our lives thanks to this old man." He kicked the limp body of Jill's driver making her very angry she had know her driver since she was a baby.

She said to the bandit, "His name was Henry and he was the best driver I ever had you idiot.' She tried getting out of the bandits grip to see if Henry was ok she still didn't know if  he was dead.

The bandit held her tightly saying," Where do you think your going missy we could get a good dime for you.'

Then she heard another voice that was not one of her capture say," What are you guys doing to this here girl?"

The guy holding her said,"We are going to sell her and if you dare try to stop us I will kill you like I did to this old man."

A young man a few years older then Jill hopped down from a tree above, he was holding a bow and arrow and he said," And how do you plan on that when you have no weapons and I do."

The bandit said," Yes we do. Boys bring me my gun I need to kill this boy now so we can get our money and go."

The young man asked," You mean this gun?" The gun he was holding looked the same as the gun one of the bandits was holding earlier. 

The bandit asked," How did you get that?"

The young mad said," Shouldn't you being running away by now."

The bandit said," Yes of coarse, boys we're going." He ran away as Jill looked at the young man who probable just saved her life. It was love at first sight for her he was handsome with long curly brown hair and big green eyes. She knew that it was just lust love at first sight is not real but it felt like it.

Jack looked at the girl he just saved and he was out of breath she was so beautiful with her curly raven black hair and violet eyes. He wanted to kiss right then and there but he knew it was wrong for she was dressed in nobel garments. He was just a farm hand nothing more nothing less it would be improper to do such a thing so he waited for her to say something which she did.

She said," Thank you young man for saving me for if you were not here I would have surly died but I must go now to mourn the loss of my family.'

He asked,"How is it that you will get there with out your carriage?" 

She said, "I shall walk."

He said, "You are far to pretty to walk by yourself down this road, do you want me to escort you.'

She said, "I would rather walk on my own."

He asked,"What if you run into those bandits again."

She said, "They are probable to Kentucky by now but you are right I do need protection from them give me that gun."

He said,"You mean this gun do you even know how to shoot it."

She said,"Yes I'm a much better shot then a man."

He said," Ok then prove it," he handed her the gun," shoot that there apple through the middle." She aimed the gun and shot the apple right through the middle.

She said," See told you so.' She walked away leaving him there standing dumb founded because what type of nobel man would allow their daughter to be taught how to shoot.

Jack then and there that he was going to marry this girl no matter what it took so the next day he quit his job and started towards the kingdom because the princess must know who this girl is due to the fact that she is a nobel and she was going to the king and queens funeral. he figured that out by the close she was wearing and by following her to where she was going.

She looked really sad when she entered the church the services were held at. Then when the funeral was over and the king and queens grave stones were placed she looked furious. It looked like she was told something that made her mad.

Jill walked all the way to the church knowing that he was following her though it was hard to hear his feet on the ground she could sense that he was following her. When she got the the church it didn't matter any more though because as soon as she saw the church she started grieving her parents. The funeral was a horrible thing for her to go through it was way to long and the speeches made about her parents brought back memories that made her sad. Finally at the end she was happy and ready to go home when she remembered she needed to ask someone for a ride so she asked one of her older relatives who was going to take control of the kingdom until Jill reached the age of 16 or got married. They said they'd be happy to bring her home they also told her that they decided they would start looking for a husband for Jill. the way they were going to do that was by a contest of strength who ever won the whole thing would marry her. Jill was furious at the thought of it, all the new ruler wanted to do was get out of being the ruler.

Jack was halfway to the palace when he heard the news and asked the person who told him this," The princess wants to get married that badly?"

the guy said,"No probable not, but the new ruler doesn't want to rule our kingdom so hes forcing it on her.'

Jack said," Might I ask want does the princess look like?"

The guy said, "You want to become king do ye well I heard she a beaut with black hair and violet eyes."

Jack jump up excited and said, 'I finally found her my princess." That night he walked all the way to the palace and fell down by the gate to wait for the morning to come.

Jill was not looking forward to seeing all these guys fight for her she only dreamed for one guy and she was sure he didn't even remember her face so when she opened the gates to let the men in she was surprised to see him.

She asked him,"What are you doing here?"

He said," I'm here for you of coarse." Weeks later he was still fighting for her there was one last opponent he had to fight to get her as his wife. The man he was fighting was massive but that made him slow and easy to get away from. In the end jack won and Jill married him with out hesitation.

1 year later they were on vacation in a place were you had to get your water from a well and the bandit that got scared off so many years ago shot him in the head. Then he shot Jill in the heart. Jack got grazed by the bullet that shot him so he lived to take care or their daughter and son.

Author's Note

If there are any spelling errors please tell me.

Reviews

[DemigodStar]

Your Story is really good and well written. There were some punctuation issues, but I'm guessing they were the fault of the computer so I won't blame you. It's a very sad story, but I really liked it. I do thing you rushed things a little bit though.

[Kamari's]

How sad yet a beautiful and noble tale of the loved fairy tail I like it the only thing is I have to say you rushed a lot yes it would have been a very long story but it is such a great write the expansion wouldn't have been noticed