All lines on the western front

Vocabulary bomber command
do you read me over?
Yes, we do poetic verse.
What is your position?
Our line has broken down, over.
What about the next stanza, poetic verse?
No good, bomber squadron.
We’ve hid a snag.
A period is blocking our process
to advance.
Can you destroy the full stop, over?
We’re sending over commas as we speak.
Should hit your page soon.
Jolly good roger!
Is the title still ok, poetic verse?
No Sir, it’s gone awol with a story
and taken the whole meaning with it.
Not to worry poetic verse.
We’ll get the grammar police
right onto it .
Until then just sit tight.
Roger! Thanks Vocabulary bomber command.
Over and out.
Where did we get this poetic verse?
From poem’s anonymous reject pile, Sir.
That figures!

Reviews

[Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn..]

Andrew,

I must say that this is quite a clever, witty, and most ingenious write, if ever I saw one, and thoroughly enjoyable as well ... Masterfully done, I might add ...

Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn de Graham

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you very much Marvin. Thanks for the big smile.

[Pete]

... sounds like a mission for baa baa black sheep (remember that old show?) so all is not quiet on the poetic front. that's what you get on the reject pile ... :)

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you Pete and I vaguely remember that show, I have to look it up.

[Troy Henson]

Loved this. Playful, witty, humorous. Just what I needed. Thank you

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you very much Troy.

[Bhuyanshi Talukdar]

Your poem is witty and clever, with an engaging sense of humor that is both playful and entertaining. I was struck by the way in which you use language to create a sense of whimsy and lightheartedness, as though the very words themselves are dancing across the page.
The comparison of the communication between the poet and the bomber command to a military operation is particularly striking, and I love the way in which you use this metaphor to create a sense of urgency and excitement. The use of military jargon and radio communication adds to the sense of authenticity and realism, and it speaks to the idea that writing can sometimes feel like a battle.
The final lines of your poem are particularly amusing, and I appreciate the way in which you use humor to create a sense of camaraderie and shared experience. Your description of the "anonymous reject pile" is both funny and relatable, and it speaks to the idea that even the most talented writers can face rejection and disappointment.

Overall, I believe that your poem is a delightful and entertaining work of art. It is a testament to the power of language to evoke emotion and to create connections between people. I hope that you continue to write and to share your unique perspective with the world, and that you never lose your sense of humor and playfulness.

[andrew mitchell]

I’m glad you see the humour. It was all for fun. Thank you.

[Ken Simm.]

I think the target was hit thanks to the aimers use of his skills.

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you Ken.

[Ken e Bujold]

once again i am rewarded for stopping by. your work always brings a smile to my day, as the playfulness of diction belies a deep understanding of what makes we humans tick. you are a master Mr Mitchell at handing out the carrots, opening the cabbage patch to imagination, and all the while we don't notice, or could be we don't mind the gentle prodding of your stick. great poem A

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you Ken for your generous praise. Chuffed I am.

[Coyote Poetry]

I did like the poetry. Lately the naysayers been nice to me. I was a old Army Sgt. You can't offend me. You took the readers into questions and thoughts. Writing is hard. I rarely like what I write. I keep writing anyway. Thank you Andrew for sharing the amazing poetry and your thoughts.
Coyote

[andrew mitchell]

You write so well John. I just like taking real life situations an applying it to the personification of things that cannot speak. Lol just fictional madness!

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Loved this play on theatre words
I heard the aust news talk of the war as theatre
It certainly is a big play
Anyway love it very well done !

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you kind Julie.

[Ted Kniffen]

Terrible thing when the front lines are breached and the reserves are uncommitted ... best to clench the colon and muddle on.

Well done Andrew ... clever and witty. I quite liked it.

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you Ted I am honoured.

[Cherrie Palmer]

Lol
Dangerous pile to look through.
Loved the wit we may have need or a emergency drop of supplies.

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you so much Cherrie.