The carnival is over!

ink on thoughts took me on this ride.

The carnival is over.

With the carnival being mine

I gave you unlimited smiles

laid out in miles

for you; striving

to find me........

and you did.

On the carousel of time

we shared.....

a little bit of you,

a little bit of me;

how you enjoyed the ride.

While the ferris wheel of love

took us to new heights,

the roller coaster of life

took us down a peg or two.

At the station we hail, waiting.....

for the inevitable darkness

of the ghost train's whistle,

to return.

Train brakes screech on rusty tracks,

pulling into the dusty plateau, 

where memories stir on upward dust;

laughter dies as the cold wind settles.

Replaced by age,

dilapidated with time,

the carnival now looks empty,

but the clowns remain

mouths agape looking on.....

at their own cemetery.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

I loved this poem my friend.
"On the carousel of time
we shared.....
a little bit of you,
a little bit of me;
how you enjoyed the ride."
The above lines were my favorite and you took me to some interesting memories. Thank you Andrew for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[andrew mitchell]

thank you for your comments John. Much appreciated.

[Coyote Poetry]

Was my pleasure and you are welcome.

[Giulia King]

I saw a colorful carnival in my head as I read this and then I read clowns and got scared haha. Great job on this one! I really like it

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you Gulia

[Lola_Bee]

so clever as it unfolds, love the mystery and twist. this is a great piece

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you Lola bee for your words.

[Alfred Kukitz]

How the colors of love and laughter turn to gray and the cinematic shows closes to a bad review.

Regards,
Al

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you Al for your words and dropping by.:)

[Einstein Noodle]

i'm just glad the clowns aren't staring at me :O/
i could hardly believe my eyes ... its so long sir ;) the metaphors are well paced and the contrast between gaiety and bleak for me is quite jarring and effective ...not your norm for sure ...did you get tricked too much? :)) killer last verse says i! no pun :)
E.

[andrew mitchell]

Haha Einstein I am unwell with the flu, disorientated somewhat hence a sort of surreal dark write.:-)

[Einstein Noodle]

a friend of mine in high school was addicted to Robitussin (back in the 60s) his name was Cloud .. sounds like you may be floating there yourself ;) i am sending up my best healing prayers for you right now .. so prepare to be well
E.

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you e, yes I've had days off work to rest. The poem wasn't that creepy was it? Lol

[Einstein Noodle]

ahahaha ...no just the clowns ..and like i said ..they aren't looking at me ;)