Soul mates!

Soul mates!

The belief amongst

    Soul mates;

they believe in reincarnation.

Where love has travelled

through the centuries,

two souls find each other

joining hands as one.

       

But how do I know?

I can't remember

that I lived again,

in love once more

different bodies, 

different ages.

Did my love start in the Roman Empire

when she parades in white now

and nothing more.

Followed by a love during

Sir Francis Drake voyages;

our love for sailing ships today.

"Was I there?" 

Were my loves surrounded by castles, 

dreams of fair maidens,

the moat protecting my anonymity;

I, a king with my queen.

"Who knows, I have no recollections."

"Somehow, I have found

the inheritance of such loves,

has not come through

the centuries of transactions."

"Did all that change

when I got the phone call

from the spirit world?"

" Hi! its me! Heather."

" I'll be wearing a red dress at the parade"

" See you soon my love!"

My hopes were high

until I found out

it was a red parade.

Reviews

[Jamestown]

Always enjoy reading your work, and always look forward to a humorous punch line.
Very unique concept:) Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you so much jamestown, nice to see you gracing writerscafe again. I hope you are well my friend.

[Jamestown]

Good to be back, I have been very busy with moving a new job and losing my
younger brother the past Friday, so no I'm not doing well and figured I need a healthy outlet for my thoughts and emotions. ..

[andrew mitchell]

sorry to hear that bro. Take care!

[Centipedle]

Soulmates, a concept I really really love. And this poem expresses I think how hard it is to find someone to love. Like finding a needle in a haystack really. I've watched my mother and other people in relationships and it's a difficult task. People fall in and out of love naturally and I am no expert on the subject. I've been with my fiance for 6 years. We met each other when I was 14, so I do think we're a special case. BUT no one should ever give up hope. Just because love sometimes doesn't last forever - doesn't make you any less of a person. Actively look for someone, and enjoy your time doing it.

Love is a harsh adventure. Pen on!

[andrew mitchell]

yes there is no time limit on love. thank you centipedie

[L.R. Kingsley]

Great poem; I like it! A few things I thought worked:
-I thought the imagery of love travelling through time at the beginning there was very evocative, especially together with the images of souls joining hands. It brings up a "chicken-and-egg"-type question; does love exist through time, creating souls to sustain it, or do souls travel through the ages, creating love to bind them together? Is the primary entity love, or soul? Brings up some great questions! :)
-I like how in the third phrase, instead of speaking in past tense and saying "I can't remember that I lived before" and running with that, you used future. Mostly, when people think about soulmates meeting again, they think, "when have we met before?" rather than "where will we meet." I think it is an excellent reversal!
-Enjoyed the imagery of the woman "parading in white"!
-The ending was interesting, and brought up even more questions

Here are some things that you might like to work on--remember, it could be that some of this stuff just flew over my head, so feel free to disregard anything I say! As the writer, you steer the ship!
-After a few pass, the historical references begin to lose some meaning--to a reader that hasn't heard about them, perhaps even more so. I think it would work best to diminish the number of them that you use, but flesh out the few you include fully so that readers can get a rich and robust image of the past you are describing!
-Some punctuation is missing every once in a while (i.e. "Who knows; I have no recollections" would work a tad better)
-Sometimes the line breaks come at odd times (i.e. the phrase starting from "Somehow I have..."
-The end, while intriguing, is a little bit too mysterious--who is Heather, and what is the point of the "red" imagery?

Overall, great work! A very thought-provoking piece! :)

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you dear poet for such a great review. Yes I am sloppy with my writings too much in a hurry to get it out there in one take lol. I will take your views on board and make the changes. I introduced the colour red to emphasise how hard it is too find your soulmate wearing red in a red parade where everyone is in red and she's in a different body! lol. Many thanks for your visit. I have to think now on the changes!

[L.R. Kingsley]

Oh, wow, I definitely understand the red now--very nice! Do leave that in!
You're very welcome! :)