The Heist

               The Heist

          I stole her virginity 

         she took my freedom

             together joined

                she banked

                 on my rob.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Honest tale in the words. I liked this poem. Thank you Andrew for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[andrew mitchell]

As always I appreciate your comments for a true poet you are John and I have to say Your taste in accompanying photos to your writes is equally stimulating! The female beauty!

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoy your poetry and without art and beauty. Could we write?

[Einstein Noodle]

sorry boy! i must come down on her side in this ... evidentiary discovery ... you do the crime.........you do the time ... no compassion for this speaker ;) pay up ..this dad kicks a*s :))
E.

[andrew mitchell]

I agree E But In this story this mum collected money while no one was in her care for years, the kid being abused left home early to live with her girlfriends parents. This mum didn't contact authorities and spent money on parties, os holidays and nice cars. Nice little earner while she worked, her husband worked ,and getting money under false pretenses abusing the system $900 a month. Not all is black and white. I've read some women get pregnant by different fathers to collect money which they spend on themselves while the kids live neglected.

[Einstein Noodle]

oh yes indeed ..all the time in the USA as well .. a blight on all working peoples that put in their dues ... i think you may have missed the intent (just me own boggled mind) and their is a huge social commentary in your above response ... not sure one can compress it ..me thinks it is epic in making ... thank you for opening the ball sir!!
E.

[andrew mitchell]

lol the world is full of issues

[Einstein Noodle]

:)) ................

[R Smith]

now that sounds like art imitating life if ever I heard it LOL, so true my friend :)

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you Richard lol

[Bear]

Nose ringed and tethered freedom forgone, had you known the cost would you still have carried on? Not sure how she banked on rob unless he was packing a rod :~)

[Dani The Unreviewed]

lol. you naughty ole' man. lol :D hahaha nice write :D

[andrew mitchell]

lol..................

[AaronFreitas]

haha... well said my friend :) Get this inserted into high school curriculum lol

[andrew mitchell]

haha child maintenance aint fun! thanks buddy!

[McBear]

I really liked this. Simple, but good.

[andrew mitchell]

thanks Poison

[McBear]

No problem!

[jesserose99]

oh this happens to our little teeny bopper friends more often then not. What an observation.

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you jesse

[Cassie]

This is really good my dear friend

[andrew mitchell]

thank you cassie my friend