How Grim!

Lurking in the shadows

He waits with menace

To knock on your door.

Tall, dark faceless with

Hooded cloak and scythe.

Selections, quotas on his list

His motives, his job, specific.

No bodies No minds!

Your Soul, torn, shredded,

Dead or piecemeal. He collects.

No plea bargains!

When you hear the noise

A piercing, terror shriek

Going through your inner self, chilled.

Your soul is his now

To be dragged through time

To be dammed, disposed.

A grim job!

But some dark force

Has to do the deed 

And a smile is extra!

Reviews

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'How grim', indeed... i guess there is no way to avoid it... when the time comes he's always there to collect... by the way, a tall faceless guy stopped by the other night with a scythe... i told him he was late and that I already had the grass around the yard trimmed :) ... sorry, had to say that... a dark write, my friend... good luck with the contest!

[andrew mitchell]

Loved the humour FT but initially I thought you did bump into him and you were being brave! Silly me! I think waving lobster claws around would scare him off lol:)

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I was going to send him to Australia first but it was daylight there already and I know in that cloak he preferred the night :)

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haha..waving lobster claws... too funny

[~]

The reaping will never end for those who are past their prime. :)

[andrew mitchell]

lol I love that statement Skittles. Its just for a contest The Grim Reaper. Thank you my friend

[~]

you are wanted in the main hall by the way lol

[andrew mitchell]

lol A one way ticket I presume!!

[~]

no no silly :) bahaha, it is true that the angel of death is beautiful, but I am not here to take your life, not just yet - hehehe
this one I mean: http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/moonskittles/1565463/ -- check FT's comment down :D

[andrew mitchell]

lol.................... I think the reaper is a Monk gone bad!!

[~]

bah! you must have never watched Meet Joe Black :D

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Grim indeed Andrew. Is it Halloween already? Creepy and told like a ghost story. Oh and cheers it is now bed time! lol

[andrew mitchell]

When those branches scratch on your windows be afraid, very afraid John. Did your trip to meet your son in London go well and fun!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

It was excellent. I took over the barbeque and they spoilt me rotten. My daughter was there too and she gave me a present and said thing than made me well up. I had gone to give my son a painting I had commissioned for him as a wedding present. And on Monday my son's father-in-law and I spent three hours clearing years of neglect from the lane beside their hose in preparation for a new fence being constructed. All in all a very enjoyable and satisfying few days thank you Andrew.

[andrew mitchell]

I'm glad John sounds like a nice family get together:)

[E G TEN]

Hello Drew, how grim it is! You've said it perfectly in this write, and
That smile at the end,, oh its just to die for :-) :-) :-) get it? Wonderful
Write my friend, its not everyday the grim gets the spotlight, but
you did it wonderful here! :-)

[andrew mitchell]

What a nice wrap! or is it rap ie kind review! Thank you EGTEN

[Valentine]

His smile or my smile is extra? All I know is that I often pray for all of the world to wake up to the fact that Satan exists, but God does also. Which one do you serve? Wake up everyone. Valentine

[andrew mitchell]

just a fictional write for the grim reaper's contest! Thank you Kathie

[Devons]

I'm fond of ironic concepts, and I like the idea this presents that somehow there is still an element of customer service involved. Sardonic and amusing and subtly droll. It conjures up the person of Death rather as if his position is officially and euphemistically termed "bailiff"....politically correct, of course.

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you Devons for dropping by and for your great review

[sereenaoutloud]

Oh this is so chilling but so fantastic ....it gave me goosebumps your attention to the little details really make your words come alive (no pun intended lol) And the last line, "and the smile is extra" ooohhh so cold !
Love this write PM !! :)

[andrew mitchell]

whoooo wooooo rrrraaarrrrr Thank you Se-raramis-eena for your lovely compliments

[sereenaoutloud]

you are always welcome. An-portho-rew

[MsJewel]

A dark and delicious little gem - seriously this gave me goosebumps. I love the last line - and a smile is extra. Exceptional writing and a pleasure to read.

:) Julie

[andrew mitchell]

Coming from you Ms Jewel is a huge rap and I thank you! I just looked at the other submissions and thought I'll add one for fun. The others are excellent in the Grim Reapers Contest. I welcome you as a friend Julie, nice to meet you ,after all this time, well since February this year and I have always looked in awe at your beautiful writes:)

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your kind words. I think your poem is great! :)

[marcus]

Maybe he'll get employee of the month award!

[andrew mitchell]

This is the one for fun I entered in the Grim Reaper Contest now but the other submissions are very very good by far! I have not a chance in hell lol