Love dies slowly

The love dies slowly

As heart strings snap one by one

Severed with a knife.

Reviews

[sereenaoutloud]

Oh this is dark and sad PM...but i totally love it! Such an impact in this senryu of few words....Brilliant! :)

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you Sereena I wanted something dark and so nice to see who I am writing to" The wonderful LL".:)

[sereenaoutloud]

Well you nailed it PM!!
Blush ...LL thanks you ! :)

[Isabel25]

I like the idea of heart strings snapping one by one....creates quite a convincing picture ...great choice of worsd :D

[andrew mitchell]

thank you annie

[Willard Wells]

Very well done Senryu. The final line was perfect. Love this piece.Thanks for sharing

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you Willard

[Sami Khalil]

Or when winter comes. Lol
Wonderful...:).................

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you Sami lol

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome muchly...:)...............

[B]

And that hurts
I can hear the strings snap

[andrew mitchell]

Like a violin lol

[B]

lol
Playing a violin with a knife
that wont just hurt me
i am thinking the neighborhood will be in pain too lol

[GreenEyedPoet]

Ouch that was painful AM!
I wonder which is worse, to feel love slowly dying or to feel love taken away quickly.
Maybe the quicker option is, because you never seen it coming.
Ok, kind of rambling here lol. Wonderful write AM. :]

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you GEP It was somewhat dark but one can witness a love dying slowly! lol

[GreenEyedPoet]

Nothing wrong with dark, in fact I love dark pieces! Though I'm sure you've figured that out by now lol.

[andrew mitchell]

of course lol......... i like them too

[GreenEyedPoet]

I've noticed lol.

[....................]

A terrible way to lose love... reminds me of a Bryan Adams song "Cuts like a Knife"... well-penned senryu, Andrew!

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you FT I was influenced by John G's painful writes!

[....................]

JG can certainly write pain, and pretty much anything else...

[andrew mitchell]

Yes its not easy to go thro' those ugly phases of life

[....................]

No it's not, my friend, but unfortunately we have to and need to sometimes in order to balance ourselves or to find out just what we are capable of

[andrew mitchell]

So true FT