The unease of being watched

The trees bare, knotted

With talons stretched

Feeling your presence

They move, they summon

They're hungry. 

There's a quiet.... unease.

You walk their winding path

Dark, a mouth you enter

Of branches hung over.

You, .... alone

They whisper

They talk

They watch.

Reviews

[AaronFreitas]

I like this write... very creepy with a perfect visual you provide :)

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you Aaron, It didn't end up that scary but a entertaining fun fest but a ton of views I've never had lol

[E G TEN]

This feels like them poor Hobbits walking in that forests and the
trees came alive.:-) In reality this is equivalent to a paranoia feeling
when walking to a room and everybody knows your deepest and
darkest secret, an eerie sensation. Wonderful piece my friend, as always! :-)

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you EG TEN for your words

[....................]

Love this,Andrew... reminds me of when i was a kid, walking home from my grandmother's house in the darkness (no street lights) of night... walking always turned to running because I always felt I was being watched...

[~]

me too, me too.. the scariest nights of my life...

[....................]

I was only a minute walk from my grandmother's house lol... that's how dark and intense it was... might have had something to do with all the ghost and fairy stories she'd tell me before I left her house :)

[andrew mitchell]

Some forests are creepy I'm not sure why and so quiet except when the breeze whispers through the pines! Thanks fellow Musket .

[andrew mitchell]

our imaginations run wild lol

[~]

and I was only half a minute far :D and yes, my cousins would brainwash me all about how if i walked under the full moon, hands would come out of the ground and drag me down ...sends shivers down/across/ up my spine even now lol

[....................]

yes, they most certainly do... who's there??????????

[~]

go away!!!!!!!!!

[sereenaoutloud]

Sending shivers up my spine,
I can feel their presence
Hear their soft whisper
nipping at my neck
I quicken my pace
Fear rising
stomach summersaulting
Bile burning the back of my throat
Do I dare to look back?

Sorry could resist this amazing write inspired me so much AM ...awesome !!

[andrew mitchell]

wow you just have that scary touch that made mine look so tame lol Amazing work you are LL Top shelf. back to the drawing board for me :)

[sereenaoutloud]

OH no no no ,,, your words ..this write was just amazing, i really love it AM , they inspired me !!

[~]

you send shivers down my spine
when your presence is near mine
hot whispers.. on my ear..
softly stroking my neck
you quicken your pace
skjrhiauerywbjefsdkjdf

LOL i think i should stop here hehehehehe :D

[andrew mitchell]

now I'm getting scared!! lol I love these review comebacks!!:)

[~]

...................lol -- sorry sereena and I compliment each other very very well :D

[sereenaoutloud]

Sassy suppose to be scary not sensual.....geez heheheh

[sereenaoutloud]

you are worse than TTM

[~]

hehehehe :D you are welcome!!!

[andrew mitchell]

you guys are brilliant . i'm not sorry lol!!

[~]

ahhh, TIM is worse .. i mean TTM :D:D

[sereenaoutloud]

LOL... see what you amazing write has done AM! You inspire us! :)

[andrew mitchell]

A saucy creepy write when combined,..... 50 shades of red!

[~]

you need to give us more credit, up it to 100 shades!! lol

[sereenaoutloud]

LMAO ...thats too funny lol

[....................]

they send shivers across my spine
tie my arms with thorny vines
pull me deep beneath the ground
captured and never to be found


...just had to chip in... sorry!

[~]

LOL chirping musketeers!!

[sereenaoutloud]

The soil takes my breath
blackness engulfs me
Their voices I can still hear
now clear...saying
"'you are now ours my dear"

[~]

that's pretty scary FT.. now we are back to scary again...

[andrew mitchell]

Hilarious !! I now find the reviews have over shadowed the write lol I shall now go to the forest with my chainsaw! lol:):) Oh yes 33!/3 shades each now for my musketeers

[~]

and sereena dear, what on earth?? lol

[~]

Unus pro omnibus, omnes pro uno

[sereenaoutloud]

mmmuuuurrrrhhhhhaaaa My creepy laugh!!

[~]

ohh.. for a second i thought you were blowing free kisses :D :D

[sereenaoutloud]

yes.. one for all and all for one!!

[andrew mitchell]

LL Musketeer, remind me when we all meet as one to use my sword to cut your strings from behind "your corset"!! lol

[....................]

Andrew, good luck in the forest...

don't you mean "what beneath the earth', Moonskittles?

did someone say free kisses... is this the line? babababa

[~]

oh my.. all of you .. i don't think i have any strength left to laugh anymore

[....................]

come on, you know you want to...

seriously, is this the line? :D

[~]

bahahaha :D ask sereena, she was giving them- i thought :D

[sereenaoutloud]

I was not giving kisses it was my evil laugh.. MMMUUURRRAAAHHH ..how does that look like kissed MS? LMSO
Oh and TTM...remember i have Cat Claws...lol

[GreenEyedPoet]

Ok what is with everybody being silly today? What have you guys been drinkin?! Lmao.

[sereenaoutloud]

hey the temp is 104 right now i have an excuse...lol

[....................]

ask Sereena, she's been working with all kinds of melons and pineapple's... who knows what she slipped into our words

[sereenaoutloud]

lowering my head...guilty ...i spiked WC...

[GreenEyedPoet]

I knew it was you that started all of this! Lol.

[~]

yes, yes, it was all her doing :D :D

[sereenaoutloud]

It was MS's idea though!...

[~]

kkkkkkkkkkkk :D wasn't me...

uhmm all of a sudden i feel like shaggy LOL

[GreenEyedPoet]

It was probably both of you! The SG gang at it again with their shenanigans lol. :P

[andrew mitchell]

Meanwhile in the woods mmmuuuuurrraaaahhhh! was heard across the world!

[sereenaoutloud]

HEHEHEHE lol AM

[Robert]

Very mysterious Andrew. I have not read of all of your work but I am surprised from what I have become use to. Diverse you are when I read this mysteriously haunting piece. Nicely done.

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you for the kind words Robert

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Now and again you stray from your out pouring of humour to write something profound and this is one such piece Andrew! Great depiction of the title in a crisp free verse.

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you my Northern Hemispherical (Hemisphere) friend for your kind words:) lol