caught!

From a multitude of thoughts caught

The net , traveling down stream.

They collect, dammed.

To be released

When needed, sought

Thoughts dammed

Banished. Feeds!

Reviews

[alf]

Hi Andrew, so have you got that thought farm up and running???? We can get a bit overwhelmed with thoughts now and again, huh? Love the idea of damming them until they're needed!!!! Great write, alf

[andrew mitchell]

lol then you don;t forget

[alf]

sooooo truuuuuuue!!!!

[Jamestown]

Well penned!
Holding thoughts back until needed
is not a bad idea, very creative and clever:)
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you Jamestown

[...]

I like this little tidbit full of creativity :)

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you lynn

[AaronFreitas]

Love the metaphor in this write :)

[andrew mitchell]

Thanks Mr Las Vegas

[AaronFreitas]

haha Mr. Las Vegas... man I got some work to earn that title but I'm sure they were glad I left haha

[....................]

A pool of thoughts dammed until needed... they certainly do feed the poet... clever writing, Andrew...

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you FT but not as clever as the leading Musketeer You!

[....................]

Oh my, Andrew, better not let d'Artagnan hear that... :)

[andrew mitchell]

In China we would call you Master Poe!!

[....................]

yes, but what would I be called in Japan? That's what I want to know lol

[andrew mitchell]

Master Try of course!!

[andrew mitchell]

hand in hand they go as Masters poe-try

[....................]

now I can rest when sleep comes... phew, I thought I'd never know... :)

[MsJewel]

A clever use of metaphor in this well written poem!

Delightful!

:) Julie

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you very much MsJewel:)

[B]

The thought tangle

I finally got out of mine
But the tangle is trouble

Love the poem

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you my friend:)

[ANTO]

There has been quite a bit of fishing related poetry and tales on here lately.
I like the metaphor your employing here Andrew.
I really like the wordsmithing of this line -
"When needed, sought..." - I think it displays a true confidence in manipulating words on the page - a less confidant writer might worry about using the comma there and still have confidence in the flow.

The banished words become detritus for the poetry seabed creatures thus supporting the food chain and ensuring a constant supply. Actually very neat, this poem.

[andrew mitchell]

Epic review Anto to the last detail, always look forward to your reviews matey!