In smoky dens the chips are down!

Chips that echo

Take centre stage;

A world of chance,

Seats four.

Smoke billows;

Chimney mouths.

Thoughts hang;

Drifting trails.

Swirling ice

in whiskey, drowns.

Close to heart

One ace, four kings.

Wary looks

Desert eyes

wonder....

Clinging to hope

Hands held close.

Thrown is the towel

Chips surmount;

Echoes glory

For one.

A sly smile

Deception near...

A joker, four kings

The switch....

Held close.

Up high, smoky den

Big brother watches

Men on move

Closing in........

Reviews

[Perkele.7885]

Big brother is always watching in big time rooms where there are games of chance and big time money changes hands you can bet on it!

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A great write, Andrew... the cheater in the room stirs the tension...

[andrew mitchell]

Thanks FT lol

[alf]

Hi Andrew. Ah!!! There is always one cheater in the group!! There are some great little lines in here. Whiskey, chimney, deserts etc. can't pick any in particular as it takes every line written to make the whole!!! Love the scene you set, can feel the tension in the atmosphere!! great write!! Luuuuuuved this, alf

[andrew mitchell]

this whole poem was built around" swirling ice in whiskey drowns" lol. Thanks alf

[alf]

Sounds good enough to me!!!!!!!!!!! in fact . . .

[ANTO]

A brilliantly tense scene painted here Andrew. I can picture De Niro and the wee guy hoping someone will cheat so they can bash 'em in.
I never was one for card schools. Bridge or snap is my bag.
Well penned my antipodean friend.
:)

[andrew mitchell]

Thanks Anto It would be fun to win without the bash from Pesci guy lol

[ANTO]

lol - yes - that would be WIN-WIN xD

[Gee]

Sweet,"swirling ice in whisky drowns"brilliant line(Bollocks,wish I'd thought of that little gem)On top form my little green and gold wearing,Barbie!attending fruit cake.

[andrew mitchell]

lol thanks Gee you black pudding you!!