Empty hollows

Hollow are the walls

That no longer speak,..... silent.

Where the fireplace raged with desire

Replaced; blackened, dark thoughts.

Desolate are the rooms

Where once love dwelled

Splashed on walls,.... colour

Now vacated.

Empty echoes travel

Through deserted hallway

Where love frolicked like the wind;

A tunnel of love, once whistling

Through the doors of love,... closed. 

The floors whisper in creaks

Of a love once running thunder.

No longer does the blackbird sing

As the dark black raven

Perches on broken gate.

The atmosphere hangs heavy, cold, 

Empty, no longer lit by sun's rays.

Death displayed, the window

In a vase, a flower no more.

A haunted house of memories; 

Decaying remains of once was.

Reviews

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When two make a home and one leaves (passes away or runs out of love) then the house becomes hollow, just as you have described it. A darker write than your usual, Andrew, but I guess as we move on in life and those around us pass on or vacate their relationships for whatever reason, a home loses its loving splendour. Well-written, my friend!

[andrew mitchell]

Its funny how moods paint your thoughts either extra light or very dark! lol!

[....................]

Yes, indeed, my friend.

[sereenaoutloud]

This is truly great the image you painted of the home now empty is very clear and you feel the emptiness! You penned this beautifully PM (your dark side lol)

[andrew mitchell]

Lol you crack me up!!! PM I love that!!! how clever to bond PM with dark! lol lol:):)

[sereenaoutloud]

heheeh hey i hear you are our 3rd musketeer Porthos...well welcome brother :))

[andrew mitchell]

Hi Aramis lol Don't tickle me with your sword or.... lol

[sereenaoutloud]

Oh i see Porthos is as bad as TTM..lol

[andrew mitchell]

All for one and one for all!!!! lol

[sereenaoutloud]

You realize that is like what 4 nick names i have for you now! lol

[andrew mitchell]

lol I have 3 whisperer I'm waiting for you to slip up LL lol:):)

[sereenaoutloud]

heeheh oh i see...yeh not gonna happen lol
AM was my first Friend on here Then TTM with his cheeky ways , PM ooooh he snuck up in the night and Porthos is my Bro!!

[andrew mitchell]

Lol Whisperer was first then as I got to know you LL jumped out in her splendour followed by sereena-so-outloud then Aramis my sister, no that's not right best mates it is and that's 4 checkmate!!! lol you are toast I'm onto 5 lol

[sereenaoutloud]

hehehe you are so funny.... tie it is then ...challenge for a 5th (I'm so going to win) huh what i didn't say anything !!

[andrew mitchell]

lol game on!!! Bring it on!!! you are toast!!! lol:):):)

[sereenaoutloud]

Mr Whisp (since you whispered at alfs poem and you can't deny it ,,,his a witness to your whispering words ...lol 5...whoop whoop!!

[andrew mitchell]

Oh Pooh!! as a cat I will pounce lol

[sereenaoutloud]

you never fail to make me smile..i imagined you saying that in your minion voice (yes i know you have one lol)

[Gee]

My oh my,so you've just been pretending to be as daft as me when all along this has been hiding inside.Really enjoyed this Andrew,my favourite of yours thus far.

[andrew mitchell]

I'm only 89% daft now Gee. Even that's too little!! Thanks Gee

[Gee]

I now know how the last remaining camel in the Sahara feels,deserted.......

[andrew mitchell]

Depends what desert as deforestation could be a problem finding the oasis especially past the dry well!

[Gee]

Sounds like many women's pre holiday ritual,trimming the bush around the long dry well....

[Gee]

Oh,I'll have the 11% deftness you're giving up please

[Gee]

DAFTNESS...

[andrew mitchell]

lol..... this could go on for a while lol always like our game of tennis of back and forth wit! This could be a poem!!!!

[andrew mitchell]

So you read my camel of her desert lol

[Valentine]

Whew, I didn't know you had a write like this one inside of you. Great job on this one. Valentine

[andrew mitchell]

lol Hi Valentine I'm learning from other more talented poets than myself lol.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

A lovely descriptive free verse Andrew, which so vividly depicts a home once shared with a lover who has now left.

[andrew mitchell]

lol You nailed it John

[Jamestown]

Another fine piece my friend!
The imagery created by your wording is terrific,
I could feel the coldness for sure,thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you Jamestown for dropping by and to give me a smile:)

[B]

Its so good
That when i read it
I can picture a home where someone once you lived
The hallways deserted and empty sound

Excellent write

[andrew mitchell]

Thanks Nisreenaa Its a dark piece devoid of humour lol

[B]

Yet i still see you laugh lol

[andrew mitchell]

wicked are my thoughts lol

[B]

Its great you got a sense of humor
Don't ever lose that :)

[andrew mitchell]

I try!!! lol without trying as warped, am I lol but I aim to please or to hear groans!! lol

[B]

Well that's pretty cool :)