HER NAME IS..........

Looking at the horizon

Gold, yellow and red;

Reflecting, shifting

On water's edge.

Her waves motion me

To come in.

She calls me

With soft, pulsating strokes.

She becomes aroused

Crashing on the beach.

She's getting impatient.

I'm drawn to her.

Her waves embrace me

With her every curl

I'm caressed by her coolness

I taste her salty breath.

My every thought washed away

I drift into her arms

Pulling me deeper

I am a rebirth in her womb.

Drawn into her darkness

I see a watery moon

I break her delicate skin

Awash I breath again.

Excited she leaves me;

Her foamy, bubbly rinse.

She's tranquil now.

Back to her old self

Gliding, slow .foreplays

She slides up the shore.

Brushing my ankles once more;

Her little teasing reminder

Come back to me for more.

She winks at me

As if to say goodbye,

Smiling she recoils

To her fullness once more.

Reviews

[alf]

Hi Andrew. Wow! Double Wow!! treble WOW!!! I have NEVER seen such an amazing personification of the sea. I cannot, will not . . . take one phrase or line and highlight it. The ultimate! Every line leads right into the next and flows, surges, embroils, recedes and ripples to calm Magnificent, no, truly magnificent. This is what we all aim for!!! alf

[andrew mitchell]

Alf you are a legend just like the sea my friend. Thank you for your BIG review I'm so pleased.

[alf]

You know me, I gotta say it as I see it.

[andrew mitchell]

I know you do lol and I always appreciate your views, your honesty and calling it as it is on my poems and the writer lol That's why we are great neighbours!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

A very descriptive piece in which all the sights and sounds and tastes are well portrayed Andrew. Like Annie I did feel that final line took away the 'mystery' and the flow of the piece.

[andrew mitchell]

Thanks John, Looks like it has to go! I hope no one asks what her name is!! lol:)

[Isabel25]

I thoroughly enjoyed this until the final line. U did not have to say that her name is the sea. It is understood from the very first line.

The words are sensuous and passionate. I love beaches very much and live five minutes way from the Arabian Sea. This really is a wonderful write. Good one Andrew! :)

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you Annie Now you got me " to have or to leave out?" this is harder than my write lol. A lovely review

[Isabel25]

Haha..I just voiced my opinion, that's all. You are the master of your poem :)

[~]

Well done. A sensuous poem that washes like the tides, begging for more. I loved the playful and passionate tone of the poem. :)

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you very much moonskittles. If it brushes and knocks your skittles over, I'm smiling from ear to ear. If It wasn't cold I would swim in her again lol :):)

[~]

don't touch my skittles!! lol ;)

[Matching Socks]

Hard not to love the sea, a beautiful vision.
Nicely done.

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you Ana

[Matching Socks]

You're welcome. :)