MAIL FROM EMILY

thanks emily

I've entered a contest

Like a lottery ; my poem

Chances are slim. I know!

Depends on the judges

Their mood as well

The imagery, the flow, and the grammar foretells

How the judges select....... I don't know!

Suddenly a message from Emily

I'm thinking all excited

I've won! I've won! I did It!

Speech ready; I like to thank all my friends.

Much appreciated. I really do!

I'm so excited. Can I say something absurd?

Golly gosh batman! Holy Toledo too!

Well I'll be stuffed! I don't believe this.

Must have been my imagery that just got me through.

I'm clicking on the mailbox

What will it say!

First prize AM

I can't believe I've actually won!

I open up the message all excited I am

To find....

VOTING IS NOW OPEN!

I'm crushed, squashed, split in two, a poet no more...... my mind shrinks shrivelled in a dark corner

Reviews

[JayceeC]

Lol...I guess not you can start to get nervous. Eyes are looking every line reading once and then going back to another, reading another and then coming back, over and over, do I move it up or down, over and over, until the contest ends.
Been write there with you on this buddy!

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you JayceeC

[Fran Marie]

A delightful delivery of excitment awaiting and anticipating the win...just mail from Emily...good job on this humorous poem..

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you Fran

[Gee]

I bet so many have felt these feelings but you have pipped them all into Número uno position by writing,and writing in fine style.Sweet write Andrew.

[andrew mitchell]

Thanks Gee, I wanted a humorous write to give a laugh but i still think that English jester humour you produce and weave is eggcellent!!!, so refined, polished almost in a stately manner!:):) Gee !!!

[♥ Ari Skye ♥]

Andrew, I really liked this piece! I think everyone has felt this at some point or another when entering a contest or something similar to it!

I love how you had me there with you. I'm sure Emily enjoyed it as well!
Great job!

[andrew mitchell]

thank you Ashley, it was fun! lol

[andrew mitchell]

WHERE IS EMILY MIGHT BE MY NEXT POEM lol

[♥ Ari Skye ♥]

I see you did, indeed right that one! I'm going to have to check it out!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Great humour loads of irony!

One possible typo?
Third stanza last line:
Must 'have' been my imagery that just got me through.

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you John, I can read a verse so many times and still not pick an error up lol. Thank you and for reviewing. It was a fun write

[John Alexander McFadyen]

I do the same Andrew and often get saved by a reviewer lol!

[ANTO]

Poor Andrew - aw my friend - hard luck. Building your hopes up so much then boom - heart sinks - sure well.... at least it didnt say 'Your poem was unsuccessful' which is always worse.
I love that you captured and penned the writers anticipatory nervousness and hope here.
Very well done mate.!!
Haven't you ever received the keys to your own sports car in the post - Reader's Digest must have three Lamborghinis of mines "all waiting for me - all I have to do is join up" (oh I just noticed, my name goes into a draw of millions - ah well) - shall we drown our sorrows together my friend ??
xD

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you ANTO it was early one morning and I checked my mail and I Thought I had won being half asleep seeing emily's mail. lol . Yes don't you love reader's digest and you are the chosen one to win! lol. Otherwise hope you are doing okay!

[ANTO]

Im doing grand Andrew - thanks for all.
:)))

[andrew mitchell]

Glad you are with us, for you are needed on WC:):)

[ANTO]

I wouldnt go that far but Im grateful to be here, thats for sure. Thank you for the kind sentiments Andrew. I appreciate that very much indeed.
:))

[Kelly Scheppers]

I think when we click on the submit button, it goes out into cyberspace...somewhere!! You nailed this one, Andrew!

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you Kelly and I will return the love on your works soon,

[Sami Khalil]

Poetry is now open too after your chances are high and off the charts you go with this talent. Pen on, sir...:)....

[andrew mitchell]

lol thanks Sami We'll see lol

[Sami Khalil]

Yep. You are welcome...:)...

[Coyote Poetry]

Good for you. You are a talented writer my friend.
Coyote

[andrew mitchell]

Thanks coyote but no I didn't win lol but hopefully other people's hearts

[Coyote Poetry]

You did and you are welcome.

[alf]

Ha ha ha ha, sorry but I had to laugh first. Hi Andrew. Isn't it just so devastating at the time. We can laugh afterwards, when the adrenalin rush takes us down into near a depressive state, and we grit our teeth as we try to regain the dignity to face the reality. Loved this, it is such an honest depiction of reality!!!, alf

[andrew mitchell]

thanks alf it was suppose to be funny all the way til voting lol

[alf]

Just couldn't help but laugh. You have an extremely witty pen, one has to wonder at the mind behind it!!!

[andrew mitchell]

wicked, cheeky, and I'm not a complete idiot some of my parts are missing. lol

[alf]

Sounds warped . . . takes one to know one!

[andrew mitchell]

lol ........our humour is definitely parallel