WHERE THERE"S NO SUNRISE.

To hold

To carry

One's weight

On mind.

To feel

The cold

The empty

One's heart divides.

To see

So narrow

A view

One eye.

To walk

A path of light

Now dark.

One cries. 

To drag

To bury

One's body

To hide

....a death inside.

Reviews

[Lizardo]

I really like this, this was a remarkable write!
We carry one's weight becasue we feel that is the correct thing, although sometimes that just happens to kill us, some of us have a cold heart becasue of the experiences life has given us, our heart divides like you poem says. Then we walk in the darkness, eagerly to watch light because we want to get out of this place.
The last line struck me though, I did not see that coming, which is good.
I really like this, Great writing!

[GreenEyedPoet]

The burden to carry ones weight around all the time is surely tough, I know that feeling far to well.
This has such depth to it, nice job. :)

[alf]

Hi Andrew. what a brilliant write! Wow this has come from way down deep, dredging memories that have cut through your soul. I loved the depth of sorrow you have shared with the reader, alf

[Valentine]

Deep sad write. I love the last grouping...to hide a death inside, that feels like what I have been doing. Keep writing Andrew. Valentine